forum writing club. (Open)
Started by @IcarusFightsTheSun book
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@IcarusFightsTheSun book

heyo! anyone want to be a story councilor for me?

wdym? like editor?

… it makes sense in my head…
i mean, i guess if anyone wants to tell if and why my idea sucks? /hj

@spacebluelily language

heyo! anyone want to be a story councilor for me?

wdym? like editor?

… it makes sense in my head…
i mean, i guess if anyone wants to tell if and why my idea sucks? /hj

ooooo kinda like a beta reader?

@IcarusFightsTheSun book

heyo! anyone want to be a story councilor for me?

wdym? like editor?

… it makes sense in my head…
i mean, i guess if anyone wants to tell if and why my idea sucks? /hj

ooooo kinda like a beta reader?

well not quite cause that would require me to write, but if anyone want to do that for me I'm down! it be good to start writing anyways.

@Serenity88 group

heyo! anyone want to be a story councilor for me?

wdym? like editor?

… it makes sense in my head…
i mean, i guess if anyone wants to tell if and why my idea sucks? /hj

well whatever it is, im interested.

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heyo! anyone want to be a story councilor for me?

wdym? like editor?

… it makes sense in my head…
i mean, i guess if anyone wants to tell if and why my idea sucks? /hj

Like, just read something you read and judge you? Sure

@IcarusFightsTheSun book

so i have a small thing and remember when i asked if there was someone who i could send stuff to and they could just, like, absolutely tear it apart for me? well pandora, ren and mag, are you guys still interested?

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Sure! My critical judgy brain is ready for the tearing

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That paaageee doesn't exist/I don't have permisson

@Serenity88 group

so i have a small thing and remember when i asked if there was someone who i could send stuff to and they could just, like, absolutely tear it apart for me? well pandora, ren and mag, are you guys still interested?

yE😎

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I can see it
Criticisms will arrive shortly

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First up: Like Serenity said, Grammar, spelling, speeelling! Lots of sentences lack a starting capital letter, thats an easy fix.
Alley is spelled wrong in 'ally rat'. In general I do enjoy the little excerpt, not sure if this is intended as a middle of story thing, or if it is supposed to be the very first scene in the story.
Also, It says he is ranting to 'the thing in the shadows' but he then reacts like he hadn't meant to wake it. While he was actively shouting and ranting to it. Or is the Snake-dragon thing different from the thing in the shadows? I'm pretty sure they're the same thing, but I could be wrong??
Also: I believe it's is a 'it is' not a ownership, you use its to refer to a thing owning the limbs. But thats mostly fine.
All in all, its good! Just mostly grammar and spelling issues.
And my brain did judge a 'skeletal' grin as maybe not making sense on a human face, but I think it makes sense for the most part.
Anyhoo
Good ideas, I like the story!

@IcarusFightsTheSun book

yep! thx guys, I'll make the next one with this in mind!
(btw, in case you'd like to know, it was kinda the same as when you talk to a dog or smth, he just didn't mean to disturb (also, I wouldn't describe him as human, but it doesn't go on long enough to delve further into that part))

@FanfictionFanatic-The-Elder group

Does anyone know of any good image generators that are free?

I just… I'm not an artist (like at all) but I see these beautiful AI pictures and want to try them out but the ones I find are usually not very good, require a signup/login, or you have to pay for them… Any suggestions?

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Interesting!
So this was meant as the very 1st part of the story someone would read? As like the prologue?

@IcarusFightsTheSun book

Interesting!
So this was meant as the very 1st part of the story someone would read? As like the prologue?

… not really…
more like I'm just gonna keep writing these tiny little short stories. the plan is to go through the story, alternating between the hero and the villain's pov and maybe throwing in a side character every now and then. so yeah it was pt1 but I wouldn't call it a prologue