forum Character Critques~ ((Closed))
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@Rainy_is_back

@Hungry_And_Tired is up first!

  • General Note: Awww is she a fandom OC? I use to love that show lol, and if not- whoops-

  • Looks: Just a couple notes for better description. Hair, long can mean from mid back, to waist, or even longer, if you could give a general space her hair ends, that would be great! Body type, alright, so athletic? What type of athletic? And what's her body shape? I've offered this information up to a lot of people, so I'll just repeat what I've said before: I know of a few cites that give different shapes, I use them personally, I'll go ahead and list them! 1, and 2

  • Prejudices: I don't think that's really one, I mean, it can still be kept in her character, you could add a field yourself! A dislikes field that could totally fit in!

  • Religion: So she's an Atheist? Right? I mean that's the technical term lol

  • Favorites: I have gotten this advice myself, and I loved it, so I pass it along to others. Why are her favorite things her favorite? Give her a reason to like the things she does!

  • Occupation/Job: So, these are basically the same thing lol. All you need to fill out is one, really. But I'd like to note vigilante isn't an actual job, unless she gets paid? But who would she get paid by for fighting? For sure not the police, because you know, that's part of the term vigilante.

All together, she's pretty good! You always have the ability to add fields for clothing, and other things! I find that useful myself. I hope I helped you out some! Happy developing!

@Rainy_is_back

@Nie-Huaisang-is-lost-in-the-stars, let's go!

  • Race: Since she's human, what specific human race is she? Is she Japanese, American, British? Just thought I'd put it out there!

  • Body type: Great descriptions! I'd add the shape she is/will be though. I have some cites, I'll list them: https://www.stylecraze.com/articles/different-body-shapes-of-women/, and https://www.123rf.com/photo_70484414_stock-vector-vector-illustration-of-different-body-shape-types-.html

  • Favorites: Guess what? I've said this a dozen times, and keep saying it! I was given this advice, and love it. Give a reason why their favorites are their favorites! It gives them a little more history and fun facts!

  • Occupation: Well, I've been told both Job and Occupation are the same thing (by multiple people), so maybe you should either make them the same, or put both options in both fields, or only fill one of the options.

  • Gallery: I love that pic! Did you draw that? It's super cute!

As you can see, I don't have much to say, she seems pretty good to me! I hope I helped you out some! Happy developing!

@Nie-Huaisang-is-lost-in-the-stars group

@Nie-Huaisang-is-lost-in-the-stars, let's go!

  • Race: Since she's human, what specific human race is she? Is she Japanese, American, British? Just thought I'd put it out there!

  • Body type: Great descriptions! I'd add the shape she is/will be though. I have some cites, I'll list them: https://www.stylecraze.com/articles/different-body-shapes-of-women/, and https://www.123rf.com/photo_70484414_stock-vector-vector-illustration-of-different-body-shape-types-.html

  • Favorites: Guess what? I've said this a dozen times, and keep saying it! I was given this advice, and love it. Give a reason why their favorites are their favorites! It gives them a little more history and fun facts!

  • Occupation: Well, I've been told both Job and Occupation are the same thing (by multiple people), so maybe you should either make them the same, or put both options in both fields, or only fill one of the options.

  • Gallery: I love that pic! Did you draw that? It's super cute!

As you can see, I don't have much to say, she seems pretty good to me! I hope I helped you out some! Happy developing!

Thanks so much, Rainy! <3

@Rainy_is_back

@Hungry_And_Tired!

  • Weight: Holy- uh yeah, that's really underweight for a 7'9'' gal. She should probably be about like 210-230 range for weight. At least more than she is, because she is suppose to be slim, so maybe bump it up a few dozen pounds

  • Body type: Again, like for Shea, I'd give a specific type. Like hourglass or pear shaped, something like that, so you have a better/clearer picture in your mind.

  • Mannerisms: Does she have any ticks? Like facial ticks or something? Rolling your eyes, or anything? I'd put down some things she tends to do while talking, or walking, or just in general.

  • Flaws/Prejudices: So I feel these two are rather contradictory. Considering she sees good in everyone. I'd maybe change it to either "most everyone" or "almost everyone" so it fits better.

  • Talents: Positivity? I don't really see this as a talent. But it's up to you if you think it is!

She seems good, though I feel like in general, a little lacking in detail. Just the slightest bit, but I think she's good!

@Oakiin

Hey, would you be willing to critique the idea of a character? I don't have time to make a character sheet, plus I don't know enough about them, but if I described their idea to you, would you critique that?

@Oakiin

Cortz: (Courts)
Cortz is an anatolian shepherd/german shepherd/st. bernard/about everything else mix that lives is Moscow. The end of the world has come, and the city has form a distinct method of survival. Cortz is one of thousands of wild dogs who have been roaming the streets for generations. The dogs have become so feral, they've begun to evolve back into wolves.
The city uses the dogs as protection, and in turn, let the wild dogs seek shelter in their homes.
Cortz is a middle-ranking pack member in a large pack of about 40-50 dogs. He's callous and uncaring, searching only for survival. Hes fairly well-liked in his pack, but not the most popular. He's one of the bigger dogs in the pack, and is tan, black, and has splotchy wolfish markings. He has a longer nose that is more jowly, like a st. bernard, and has the long bushy tail of a german shepherd. Hs ears are half-perked, and he had almond shaped, bronze eyes. Cortz was born into the pack, and as one of the strongest dogs, helps defend their territory from other packs and humans who aren't native to the city.

@Rainy_is_back

Hi again! ^^ do you mind if I drop off two more characters or are you too busy? If not it’s totally understandable!

And nope, I'm Not super busy! So go ahead!