forum Things You Want LESS Of In Books

Started January 21, 2019 by @HighPockets group

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From what I know of them via the incorrect quotes chat, Kit, Ara, and Andor are my favorites!

And @Starfast, I'm Ara, Dallas, or Garzlan, or a combination of the three.

I have maybe three male characters and out of them only one has a name, which I'll most likely end up changing

I have a lot of male and female characters (I think about an equal number of each, plus a nonbinary person) and they're basically the only aspect of my story that I've put any effort into thus far.

Are we talking about our boys?

Are we talking about our boys?

i suppose so

^ Yeah

From what I know of them via the incorrect quotes chat, Kit, Ara, and Andor are my favorites!

It makes me really happy to hear that someone else (other than me) likes Ara. I feel people tend to not like him as much, but he's one of my favourite characters to write about.

^ Yeah

From what I know of them via the incorrect quotes chat, Kit, Ara, and Andor are my favorites!

It makes me really happy to hear that someone else (other than me) likes Ara. I feel people tend to not like him as much, but he's one of my favourite characters to write about.

The sarcastic, takes-no-shit character is one of my favorite tropes! Dima is one of those as well, and I love writing about him and others who fall under that umbrella!

Stop pretending to use Bible verses at the beginning of chapters. Seriously. It's rude. That's not what that verse says. That's not even a book in the Bible. Just no. Absolutely not. And stop using only partial verses without specifying that it's not the whole verse.
Rant about a book I'm reading, not an attack on anyone on here. But this is a trend that needs to die. Like, cool if you want to, but don't make stuff up, and don't blatantly disregard context for the sake of it matching your chapter. That bugs me even more than using bad language simply for the heck of it.

I don't even read the quotes at the beginning of chapters, but it's annoying. Especially when it alternates between Bible quotes, Fake Deep stuff, and cheesy pop songs.

Oh my gosh that all sounds horrible.

I hate it when characters are made attractive and it is only used as a plot device to make people fall in love with them. If you're intentionally trying to make people warm up to them for something significant in the plot then it's acceptable, because people tend to gravitate towards liking attractive people, but just making someone hot because "they're a love interest" is not only shallow, but lazy. In one of my stories, the protagonist's older brother is shockingly attractive to help cover the fact he's actually one of the least stable and least moral characters in the group, which is knowledge the protagonist only really attains and accepts much later in the book.

Plus, I agree with all the previous points made—"attractive" has so many meanings. The character I just mentioned is fairly lean and tall, and nowhere near built. He also has a lot of freckles and birthmarks. I want more female characters described as beautiful because of the way her hair frizzes, and her round cheeks blush when she smiles, the birthmarks on her face, her stout physique. Just…human things!

I have a lot of characters and I consider a majority of them to be fairly attractive, even though they have all pretty different body types, skin tones, hair and eye colors, etc.

OUT OF NOWHERE CHARACTER CHANGES!!!
Especially to fulfill a plot point that another character could….

CHARACTER ASSASSINATION FOR THE SAKE OF DRAMA

Cough Daenarys Targaryen Cough

lines that sound like they might be iconic on paper but are really cringy when actually said out loud
("sorry cheryl bombshell, my specialty is ice" like who the fuck wrote that godforsaken show)

lines that sound like they might be iconic on paper but are really cringy when actually said out loud
("sorry cheryl bombshell, my specialty is ice" like who the fuck wrote that godforsaken show)

"I'm weird. I'm a weirdo. I don't 'fit in'. You ever see me without this stupid hat? That's weird."
Also it erased a canonically aroace character's identity so yep it can burn

Cough Daenarys Targaryen Cough

Imm die mad about this

lines that sound like they might be iconic on paper but are really cringy when actually said out loud
("sorry cheryl bombshell, my specialty is ice" like who the fuck wrote that godforsaken show)

To be fair, I don't think the writers of Riverdale have ever heard real teenagers speak or something. The "Cheryl Bombshell" line sounds like Shakespeare compare to "We're going to be a ship." "Aww, Ethelhead?" and " There'll be wanted posters with your strong jawline all over town."
Like who thought those lines were a good idea? I'd like to have a word.

lines that sound like they might be iconic on paper but are really cringy when actually said out loud
("sorry cheryl bombshell, my specialty is ice" like who the fuck wrote that godforsaken show)

"I'm weird. I'm a weirdo. I don't 'fit in'. You ever see me without this stupid hat? That's weird."
Also it erased a canonically aroace character's identity so yep it can burn

thANK YOU. also you forgot the part where he touches his nose and says "i don't. want to fit in."
some idiot in jail: i dropped out in fourth grade, to run a drug cartel and support my nana
archie's actor: makes a "what the fuck is this line" face
archie: then you haven't known the triumphs and defeats, the epic Highs and Lows of highschool football

lines that sound like they might be iconic on paper but are really cringy when actually said out loud
("sorry cheryl bombshell, my specialty is ice" like who the fuck wrote that godforsaken show)

To be fair, I don't think the writers of Riverdale have ever heard real teenagers speak or something. The "Cheryl Bombshell" line sounds like Shakespeare compare to "We're going to be a ship." "Aww, Ethelhead?" and " There'll be wanted posters with your strong jawline all over town."
Like who thought those lines were a good idea? I'd like to have a word.

Any time a couple says their shipname out loud an angel gets stabbed and thrown into a river.

lines that sound like they might be iconic on paper but are really cringy when actually said out loud
("sorry cheryl bombshell, my specialty is ice" like who the fuck wrote that godforsaken show)

"I'm weird. I'm a weirdo. I don't 'fit in'. You ever see me without this stupid hat? That's weird."
Also it erased a canonically aroace character's identity so yep it can burn

thANK YOU. also you forgot the part where he touches his nose and says "i don't. want to fit in."
some idiot in jail: i dropped out in fourth grade, to run a drug cartel and support my nana
archie's actor: makes a "what the fuck is this line" face
archie: then you haven't known the triumphs and defeats, the epic Highs and Lows of highschool football

WAIT I THOUGHT THAT LINE WAS A JOKE
WTF

thANK YOU. also you forgot the part where he touches his nose and says "i don't. want to fit in."
some idiot in jail: i dropped out in fourth grade, to run a drug cartel and support my nana
archie's actor: makes a "what the fuck is this line" face
archie: then you haven't known the triumphs and defeats, the epic Highs and Lows of highschool football

WAIT I THOUGHT THAT LINE WAS A JOKE
WTF

IT WASN'T