forum The Roodeness Shenanigans

Started May 27, 2020 by Deleted user

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You shouldn't be writing to an audience more mature than you.

i feel like i do tho

I really don't appreciate the whole "yeah I'll work on it thanks" and then being asked the next day if I'd be willing to write it. It's faker than Dolly Parton and infinitely more disgusting.

how DARE you insult the queen of country

I'm so sorry

that sounds sarcastic and I would like to remind you that this woman started a nonprofit charity to give kids books for free because her dad couldnt read and she swore that if he could he could have taken on the world and also that she plays like 13 instruments and has written so many songs and also 9-5 slaps

It's genuinely not, I'm not insulting her, just her boobs. I don't know a lot about her but she seems fine. But her boobs make me uncomfy

you would hate to see me in real life lmao

You shouldn't be writing to an audience more mature than you.

i feel like i do tho

you seem pretty mature, you're Old(ish) and you handle what you write well.

I feel like people hate me on here, (I'm probably right) but I don't want that to be the case.

You want some goddamn advice? I'll give you some goddamn advice
It all started on that fateful day, the 9th of October, 2010.
Shitty beginning, "fateful day" sounds absolutely ridiculous

I had gotten my report card. Everything was a good grade, except for one. English. I got a D. I knew that my father would punish me, but I didn’t know how. I thought he would spank me or ground me. I was wrong.
So her dad, out of nowhere, decides to rape her because she got a bad grade? A single D?
He told Allison to go to her room before he raped me. Her room, as I found out later, was 99.99% soundproof.
I'm sorry, but an average home does not have 99.9% soundproof rooms, unless they were specially made that way. And if a father puts in the effort of getting 99.9% soundproof rooms for his house, I don't believe that he'd wait that long to assault his daughter.

* “He told me to take off my pants. I did. 'Take off your panties,' he told me. I didn’t listen. I refused. He grabbed my panties and
removed them forcefully.*
Oh my fucking God, just say "underwear". "Panties" has a sexual connotation to it, and also sounds immature and just plain stupid.

He pinned me to the ground, my back facing him. Then he… he… put his thing… inside of me. I felt violated, breached, worthless, nay less than worthless. I felt like nothing to anyone. I screamed, but nobody came.
"Nay, less than worthless" is, again, ridiculous. Just say "worthless" or "less than worthless" instead of listing off a half-dozen adjectives.

He called me bitch, cunt, slut, whore, dyke, twat, etc, every time he raped me.
Needless "etc.", and again-too many adjectives. Just stick with two or three.

All because I got a D in English class. He did this to me every time I got a bad grade or misbehaved. I misbehaved and got bad grades often because I didn’t see a reason to do good. There wasn’t any reason to. I screamed everytime he did it.
I genuinely don't see how someone who knows that they will be raped if they don't behave and get good grades would decide to intentionally misbehave and get bad grades? If anything, Rachel should be focusing on trying to never step a toe out of line and ace every class.

Finally, it ended. I was 16, sophomore year. Allison, one day for some reason, came down to see what was happening.
Why isn't Allison locked into her soundproof room?

My father was at it once again. She was disgusted and shocked when she saw what was happening. She tackled him down and kept him down. I was able to pull my pants and panties up. Allison called the police and had him on the ground until police arrived and arrested him.
Except in Rachel's profile it says that Rachel hates Allison because she did nothing to stop it, so something doesn't line up here.

Also, it's absolutely disgusting that Rachel is *peer pressured into telling her friends about how her father repeatedly raped her when she was a teenager.

I really don't appreciate the whole "yeah I'll work on it thanks" and then being asked the next day if I'd be willing to write it. It's faker than Dolly Parton and infinitely more disgusting.

how DARE you insult the queen of country

I'm so sorry

that sounds sarcastic and I would like to remind you that this woman started a nonprofit charity to give kids books for free because her dad couldnt read and she swore that if he could he could have taken on the world and also that she plays like 13 instruments and has written so many songs and also 9-5 slaps

It's genuinely not, I'm not insulting her, just her boobs. I don't know a lot about her but she seems fine. But her boobs make me uncomfy

you would hate to see me in real life lmao

Y'all are so pretty I'd hate to see any of you in real life

You shouldn't be writing to an audience more mature than you.

i feel like i do tho

you seem pretty mature, you're Old(ish) and you handle what you write well.

oh no i'm Old

I really don't appreciate the whole "yeah I'll work on it thanks" and then being asked the next day if I'd be willing to write it. It's faker than Dolly Parton and infinitely more disgusting.

how DARE you insult the queen of country

I'm so sorry

that sounds sarcastic and I would like to remind you that this woman started a nonprofit charity to give kids books for free because her dad couldnt read and she swore that if he could he could have taken on the world and also that she plays like 13 instruments and has written so many songs and also 9-5 slaps

It's genuinely not, I'm not insulting her, just her boobs. I don't know a lot about her but she seems fine. But her boobs make me uncomfy

you would hate to see me in real life lmao

Y'all are so pretty I'd hate to see any of you in real life

Crocs is Attractive

I really don't appreciate the whole "yeah I'll work on it thanks" and then being asked the next day if I'd be willing to write it. It's faker than Dolly Parton and infinitely more disgusting.

how DARE you insult the queen of country

I'm so sorry

that sounds sarcastic and I would like to remind you that this woman started a nonprofit charity to give kids books for free because her dad couldnt read and she swore that if he could he could have taken on the world and also that she plays like 13 instruments and has written so many songs and also 9-5 slaps

It's genuinely not, I'm not insulting her, just her boobs. I don't know a lot about her but she seems fine. But her boobs make me uncomfy

you would hate to see me in real life lmao

Y'all are so pretty I'd hate to see any of you in real life

Crocs is Attractive

Y'all know that Crocs has selfies in their profile, right?

I really don't appreciate the whole "yeah I'll work on it thanks" and then being asked the next day if I'd be willing to write it. It's faker than Dolly Parton and infinitely more disgusting.

how DARE you insult the queen of country

I'm so sorry

that sounds sarcastic and I would like to remind you that this woman started a nonprofit charity to give kids books for free because her dad couldnt read and she swore that if he could he could have taken on the world and also that she plays like 13 instruments and has written so many songs and also 9-5 slaps

It's genuinely not, I'm not insulting her, just her boobs. I don't know a lot about her but she seems fine. But her boobs make me uncomfy

you would hate to see me in real life lmao

Y'all are so pretty I'd hate to see any of you in real life

I am more egg than pretty

Oh, I get Crocs Pictures a lot, more than the ones y'all see on their profile

you guys stop outting my shit selfies

my insta has the good pics

my insta has the good pics

and the cursed foods

Also, it's absolutely disgusting that Rachel is *peer pressured into telling her friends about how her father repeatedly raped her when she was a teenager.

This needs to be said again
And again
And fucking again
Because that's horrifying. Even Bad Friends and Random Strangers know not to do that. It takes a shitty, shitty, shitty person to do that to someone. Especially a friend.

my insta has the good pics

and the cursed foods

slightly cursed

Also, it's absolutely disgusting that Rachel is *peer pressured into telling her friends about how her father repeatedly raped her when she was a teenager.

This needs to be said again
And again
And fucking again
Because that's horrifying. Even Bad Friends and Random Strangers know not to do that. It takes a shitty, shitty, shitty person to do that to someone. Especially a friend.

If my friends knew, even vaguely, about trauma I was dealing with and refused to take no for an answer when I said I didn't want to discuss it, I would cut ties with them. Especially if they kept pestering me about something as serious as sexual assault.

Don't say you didn't ask and don't disappear when you get what you ask for

What Im trying to say is if someone could help me with what to do better, what to take out, etc. I am not good at wording things. Basically just giving me advice on what can be improved.

You ask for critiques, then we give ya what you ask for, then you just leave
You can't improve as a writer if you can't accept criticism.

Also, it's absolutely disgusting that Rachel is *peer pressured into telling her friends about how her father repeatedly raped her when she was a teenager.

This needs to be said again
And again
And fucking again
Because that's horrifying. Even Bad Friends and Random Strangers know not to do that. It takes a shitty, shitty, shitty person to do that to someone. Especially a friend.

If my friends knew, even vaguely, about trauma I was dealing with and refused to take no for an answer when I said I didn't want to discuss it, I would cut ties with them. Especially if they kept pestering me about something as serious as sexual assault.

I get annoyed when people ask me if I'm okay more than twice and my life is pretty good. I would only even want to hear about something like that if my friend wanted to tell someone and that someone was me. I'd say, "If you ever want to talk, let me know, I'm here for you." And then bombard them with kitten pictures and distractions

I attempted to fix it.
Tell me what needs to improve

Tell me what needs to improve

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"'Take off your underwear,' he said. This was a first. He had called me sexual insults like slut and whore and such since I was 8, but never this. I guess this was a tipping point for him. I resisted. He was angry now. He pinned me to the ground, and forcefully removed them. Then he put his… thing… inside me. I was in so much pain then.

"This would go on until I was 18 years old. It hurt so much. He kept calling me things like cunt, twat, dyke, etc while he… raped me. Then he… came inside of me. It was gross and weird. I hated it. Then he told me not to tell anyone or he would do it again. I didn't tell anyone, until I turned 18. It was terrible.

"I tried to kill myself. Twice. Everytime I attempted to kill myself, he would rape me. I felt like I didnt mean anything, like I was just a toy for pervs to use and look at. I hated myself. But at last, I found help."

Is "everything" too vague of an answer?

Kinda

Tell me what needs to improve

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"'Take off your underwear,' he said. This was a first. He had called me sexual insults like slut and whore and such since I was 8, but never this. I guess this was a tipping point for him. I resisted. He was angry now. He pinned me to the ground, and forcefully removed them. Then he put his… thing… inside me. I was in so much pain then.

"This would go on until I was 18 years old. It hurt so much. He kept calling me things like cunt, twat, dyke, etc while he… raped me. Then he… came inside of me. It was gross and weird. I hated it. Then he told me not to tell anyone or he would do it again. I didn't tell anyone, until I turned 18. It was terrible.

"I tried to kill myself. Twice. Everytime I attempted to kill myself, he would rape me. I felt like I didnt mean anything, like I was just a toy for pervs to use and look at. I hated myself. But at last, I found help."

Is "everything" too vague of an answer?

Maybe?

Tell me what needs to improve

Spoiler - click to show.

"'Take off your underwear,' he said. This was a first. He had called me sexual insults like slut and whore and such since I was 8, but never this. I guess this was a tipping point for him. I resisted. He was angry now. He pinned me to the ground, and forcefully removed them. Then he put his… thing… inside me. I was in so much pain then.

"This would go on until I was 18 years old. It hurt so much. He kept calling me things like cunt, twat, dyke, etc while he… raped me. Then he… came inside of me. It was gross and weird. I hated it. Then he told me not to tell anyone or he would do it again. I didn't tell anyone, until I turned 18. It was terrible.

"I tried to kill myself. Twice. Everytime I attempted to kill myself, he would rape me. I felt like I didnt mean anything, like I was just a toy for pervs to use and look at. I hated myself. But at last, I found help."

Is "everything" too vague of an answer?

Maybe?

But like
She's not wrong