The weather fit her mood Gloomy She couldn't believe her Sister kill her Mother THERE Mother out of jealousy ¨why?, why would she do this my wedding was two days ago everything seemed fine then..why?!" she wept ¨Luna dear I know you're still in shock but you need to prepare for your Coronation¨ said Creator Alexis Coronation…I never expected it to happen like this my mum was supposed to be here, she was supposed to hand me the crown when she was ready to step down not get murdered¨ said Luna ¨ I know sweetie I know I was expecting her to be here too never in a million years did I expect my best friend to get murdered by her own daughter…its time for you to rise luna your now the official leader of the elementals you will use your powers for the greater good and bring humanity back to balance ¨said creator Alexis ¨thank you mommy¨said luna ¨anything for my daughter-in-law¨
Right, right. I must say, within 6 seconds of reading this I already spotted at least five problems.
RIght, right. I must say, within 6 seconds of reading this I already spotted at least five problems.
I don't write that often I'm a beginner
The weather fit her mood
Add a period.
Gloomy
Add another period.
She couldn't believe her Sister kill her Mother
Sister should not be capitalized, and neither should mother. Kill should be turned to killed.
THERE Mother out of jealousy
It's their mother, not there. Also, mother should not be capitalized. And there should be a period after jealousy.
And now I have to leave. Gotta prepare some stuff for school tomorrow.
yo why the fuck are you posting that here
Yes, this too. There's a nifty Sharing & Critiques section you could try.
yo why the fuck are you posting that here
Yes, this too. There's a nifty Sharing & Critiques section you could try.
thx im still learning about notebooks btw
Is there any good reason we're celebrating every new page?
