forum What is the worst thing you've done to your characters?

Started November 24, 2018 by Deleted user

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You… Don't want to know, my characters have been through the most fucked up shit

Well I think probably making one character immortal and forcing them to go on the run then having them watch their loved ones die of old age before forcing them into slavery for hundreds of years. Then making them a benevolent god-type figure over a people who are eventually wiped out, their belief that kept her powers strong getting snuffed out so she can't do anything as she watches the people she's looked after for centuries die one by one. Then her finding new family, before watching them die like all the people she's ever loved before in her long life of suffering.

My girl Alena is cursed to be immortal. She is stuck as a ghost forever. And when her family dies she can never see them again.

My girl Alena is cursed to be immortal. She is stuck as a ghost forever. And when her family dies she can never see them again.

This hurt to read; I had a niece named Allena, who sadly passed away before she could even be born. 😭

Ooh. I have a (probably) sister who died before she was born.

Well, added on top that the Mistress of the labs of my book is an actual psychopath driven mad by the death of her husband so she’s creating all sorts of half human creatures and giving them literally no privacy or happiness in life, I also had her create a monster that was supposed to be the first human made completely in the lab without the help of an egg or sperm. They’re disgusting creatures that can sense the vibrations of the heart (so to say, they can ‘see’ a heartbeat). I took one of my most innocent characters, introduced them to these creatures, and watched as my character was ripped to shreds in a very painful, noisy death.

I've been hesitating to post to this because I assumed what i've done to my characters wasn't that bad but then as I was telling a friend the other day about their stories she looked genuinely concerned so why not!1!!!1

Yuki
He grew up in a super peaceful town with a loving family and a wonderful girlfriend! He was considered one of the smartest people in his village and life was gr8! In fact, he was about to marry his beautiful fiancee! It's his wedding day and,,,,,a ton of humans come and literally kill everyone except him!:) His fiancee gets shot and is all like "let's say our wedding vows so we'll at least be married" and so Yuki says his wedding vows but his fiancee dies before she can say her's lol!!!

Exila
i killed her dog
ok her mom accidentally crashed the car into the dog
but ya girl exila was Not Happy about it that's for sure (she killed her mom) (but that's a spoiler so shshshsh)

Astrid
She's actually a background character but she gets the worst of it (that might be a lie) anyway her parents are part of this secret organization but when they realize this organization is about to start experimenting on humans they're like "no thanks" but then the organization is like 'we can't have anyone ou t there that knows about this' so they kill her parents!! then they take her brother to do experiments on and everyone presumes the brother to be dead but she's tryna tell everyone he's alive and they're like "no just like ur parents he hella dead!" (he not)

and technically there's Jean but he's an asshole so he had it coming

This gonna take a bit but here's the deal. All my characters have been through some horrendous shiz nit, but two stand out tremendously: Talu and Helen.

For Talu: his introduction begins with him horribly experimented and mutated beyond the limitations of magical capabilities and he looks like a walking science disaster. His body hurts all the time, he has voices in his head that are both the spirits of dead test subjects and his own hallucinations, he suffers from memory loss and doesn't know who he was before he was kidnapped by sorcerers. And to top it all off. The one guy. The one guy he fell in love with. The one guy who he truly felt safe and at peace with. THE ONE GUY WHO FORGED AN UNBREAKABLE BOND WITH AND IS THE ONLY PERSON IN THE WORLD WHO HE DOESN'T HATE. Doesn't love him back. He can't. He has the legitimate inability to form romantic feeling for another person. So Talu was obviously crushed and depressed by this. Which made one of the malevolent spirits of the dead test subjects that live in his head possess him in his moment of weakness and went about killing people for the heck of it. Talu, being possessed, could do jack, and was stuck like this for several years. It was his crush/lover that ultimately snapped him out of it, but not before killing said crush/lovers best friend and in turn, having his crush/lover kill Talu and finally put him out of him misery.
That all sounds bad, but there's actually a good ending to all this, cause Talu is one of my favorite characters and I don't want him to suffer that much. Basically, after he dies, his crush/lover dies sometime later and they reunite in the afterlife with Talu bawling his eyes out about how sorry he is for ruining their life and for falling for him in the first place and for being so weak and a bunch of other stuff. But crush/lover tells him that he knows that Talu wasn't in control of himself, and in a shocking turn of events, apologizes to Talu for not being able to love him back properly. He says that even though he can't love romantically, he can still love platonically. He says that they can't kiss and stuff, but he'll be darned if he can't hug/hold hands/ support/ save the world with/ hang out with/ love unconditionally and unprovokedly his best friend ever. Talu, being the biggest sap ever, cries even freaking more and finally makes a proper confession of love to him. It's all sweet but the baseline is that platonic love shouldn't be looked as a lower form of love compared to romantic. Because crush/lover can and WILL destroy ANYONE that hurts Talu. He cares about his friends a whooooole lot.

OKAY SO HELEN: her tragedy is different from Talu's, cause she actually brought this upon herself one way or another. The gist is, she's a powerful witch with the ability to control the powers of the void (super powerful entity of complete darkness and nothingness) and played with them so much, she broke the fabric of time and reality, fixed it, broke it again, tried to fix it, did a bad job, stopped caring, abused polymorphism, kept stealing innocent souls, kept stealing stars from the skies and put them in little jar bottles, created like four different kingdoms and demolished all of them in different ways, had affairs with at least AND I'M TALKING AT LEAST 200 different people, and finally, after literally centuries of screwing with everything and everyone, the void grew tired of her shenanigans and punished her. Now, these punishments don't sounds that bad, but the thing is, they are. The void ripped both her eyes in pairs of four. It sealed her lips together and took away her throat. Then, it put these horrific, parasitic, unnatural worms in her gut that cannot be taken out and burn in herself forever. And finally, immortality. With all this pain she must bear, she must live with it forever. Thing is, she absolutely deserved. What she did wasn't evil, but it was not kind. So she now faces these consequences. She outlives all her lovers. She either kills them accidentally because of her crooked, twisted body or they run at the sight of her true self. She has created remedies to deal with all her ailments except for immortality. She truly cannot die and walks alone, knowing she will succumb to boredom, and later insanity, and even later, nothing. She fears this evermore.
BUUUUT
Like I said, I don't want my ocs to suffer ALL the time, so she gets her own happy ending. She meets a strange, but lovely man that introduces her to a world she never truly explored. Nature. He holds utmost respect for the trees, the animals, and all that life has to offer, something she cannot comprehend as nature rejects her existence for her crooked soul. But they fall in love anyway, he doesn't run at the sight of her eight eyes, no mouth, worm belly self and loves her all the same, and in due time they have a baby. All seems great until the world starts ripping apart again. This is the void being VERY pissed off at her again. It tells her that her child has inherited all of her abilities and is basically another being that can manipulate the void, and it DOES NOT want that. It tells her that she must decide to either give up her physical being and become an entity of void matter, or kill her daughter. Helen wanted death since day 0 and doesn't want to kill (another) baby, so she gives herself to the void, although very reluctantly. Before she ascended, se asked to leave two of her eyes with her family. She basically (cause witchcraft) ripped out her two of her eight eyes and gave one to her lover and the other to her daughter while they were asleep. This was her farewell to them as she couldn't bring herself to say goodbye.
It seems bittersweet, but Helen gets to embrace the closest thing to death she's got all while not really dying, as she still watches over her family even though she can't reunite with them.

RUNNER UPS:

• Hel: Her sister killed her while she was pregnant and devoured her child.
• Thorne: Was left to shoulder the death of her first and only child after her lover left her.
• Frederick: Accidentally killed his 8 year old son while trying to save him from crooks and couldn't afford a funeral for him.
• Phantom: Was too late to save his crew and arrived at their secret base to see them all gunned downed and murdered.
• Crefus: Grew up being hated and despised for something he couldn't control (He was born a hybrid) and reluctantly accepts all the abuse he gets
• Jane: (WHERE DO WE START??) Has a mental parasitic infestation that lives in the back of her mind that forces her to do terrible things; fell in love only for mental parasite to possess her and kill her lover; had to abandon her child because she believed she would be a terrible mother; suffers from mental breakdowns constantly; depression
• Jiangshi: Became a jiangshi against his will; is sentient, but at a price (he feels his muscles shutting down and it's painful for him) doesn't want to devour human souls, but he's weaker that way; missing his eye; his mother threw him out of their house after seeing what he became; has to travel with a bunch of jerkwads
• Lucille: Constant never ending pain all over her body; has to obey the will of a demon; forced to hate her younger brother who she promised to protect; taking off her clothes reveals her deformities and mutations and none of them look pretty; she gets one hour of sleep a week; she's dealt with all of this for over a decade

Ugh that was long i'm sorry for the wall of text

I love the ending with Talu.

Scrapped them all and restarted a few months ago

I have a character named Sophie and when she was 5 her whole family was in a car crash and she remembers a brother that was very much alive but everyone tells her he's dead. She refuses to believe that so they put her on meds because they thought she was crazy. 11 years later her brother turns up again but he's an ass but she doesn't see that at first and he ends up using all of them for his own personal gain and tries to use them to take over the world. Then there's Alex, but she just gets sold out to her brother by her boyfriend but he's a weak-minded football player and she's honestly kind of a ho so really she had it coming

hmmm let's see

• célestine: she unintentionally caused the death of her best friend and never got the chance to say goodbye to him
• adrien: lost his parents, brother died from smallpox, one of his close friends was killed, and he's super gay in the 1700s which isn't ideal
• li: her father died when she was 4, her brother and mom were killed when she was 18
• cam: he's severely depressed, he got betrayed by his first boyfriend, and he was kidnapped and mildly tortured by aforementioned first bf (his friend got kidnapped too and was sexually harassed by some henchmen so)
• dawn: her brother and his friends drowned her for being a lesbian bc it was the 50s ya know and she had a sort of miserable existence as a ghost before finally finding peace from a living girl she could never be with
• but the most tragic story probably belongs to erika: her mom died when she was like a year old, she doesn't get along with her dad, one of her close friends got killed right in front of her eyes, she has depression, and she's part of an army that fights against horrifying 8-feet-tall monsters

those are the highlights, but there's also a jewish kid whose school is run by nazis, several kids with horrible parents, lots of mental illness, and god knows what else

I killed my MCs parents and made him think he did it.

The worst thing that I ever done to my characters is create them in the first place. :I

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Ya'll are such good writers I swear! I thought I treated my characters bad!

My character Akiya, has, to simplify it, a power where he can generate a deadly toxin from the palms of his hands. His breath is also toxic, so he always has to wear a gas mask.

As a kid (when his power manifested), he almost killed his parents, which he blames himself for, making him afraid of hurting people.

When he’s fifteen, he gets kidnapped, along with one of his classmates (who is a close friend of his). The kidnappers take his gas mask and lock him and his friend in a cell together. He tries to get them to open the door, but they ignore him, leading to him watching his friend slowly die from the toxins he’s producing, despite him trying his best to hold his breath.

The death was basically the friend starting to cough violently, eventually spitting up blood and passing out (and dying).

Is it sad that my character that's been through the most crap is the least screwed up?

Samuel, a superhero, had to turn in his bestfriend's dad for mercenary work. His friend, Cameron, turned on him and has tried to kill Sam multiple times before he convinced him to be better than his dad and use his big brain for the good of the world.

My protagonist is a very sensitive man that hates himself for being a loser and lacking any motivation whatsoever - he even attempted to commit suicide at one point, but was too scared to bring himself to actually do it, which made him even more miserable. He was also bullied when he was little, lost his best friend and only moral support, was forced to study something he didn't even like and had his artistic drive constantly opressed by his father, teachers and colleagues, thus being unable to express himself.

Now, this may seem bad enough, but there's a catch. All that negative energy he piled up over the years ended up becoming an actual monster inside his head. This hideous, violent creature feeds off of the protag's feelings, gaining power and starting to literally take over his body whenever he feels any intense emotion (yes, including "positive ones") - luckily it's temporary and he'll go back to normal after calming down, but the transformation itself is extremely painful and not pretty at all, and most often than not he'll be stuck in this medium stage where he basically looks like a grueling Frankenstein-like abomination with the mind of a pained, scared man. After this started happening he was forced to adopt a cold façade in order to try and avoid it from affecting his normal life, so he's now able to work and do other stuff without nothing happening, but when he's back at home he basically breaks down due to his repressed emotions. His self-esteem was low enough before, now imagine the nosedive it took after this little… issue appeared. And I'm not even going through the stages of the transformation, or the whole "destabilization" mechanic i included for the sole purpose of making him suffer even more hahaha

Stuff gets better later on and he learns to live with it and even gets an accepting wife and yadda yadda, but the things he had to go through before were far from nice. Sometimes i feel sorry for him. But then I remember how fun it is to write angst :^)

He reminded me of Alexei Karenin at first.
Then Jekyll and Hyde.

He reminded me of Alexei Karenin at first.
Then Jekyll and Hyde.

Yes, Jekyll and Hyde were some of my main inspirations. The duality of man has always been an extremely appealing topic to me.

You read it?

You read it?

Yes, although a shortened version for school. It was a very good read regardless. I should probably pick up the whole thing, though.