forum Any Songwriters?

Started March 13, 2019 by @lemondad

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hi it’s your resident emotional mess here who also owns a guitar and ukulele and shit and writes mediocre songs
this is lit and you are all so good wtf

I guarantee I am NOT, but you should share some of your things!

okay sure here goes

sorry it took me so long i realized i didn’t have any songs newer than 2018 so i wrote one?? umm yeah so it’s kinda bad but i tried lol

when we first met you seemed so happy
but was it all just a lie
we tried to make believe that everything was fine
but deep down we knew we were wrong

we were trying to fit together
but we found that we we didn’t match
now i’m stuck with a letter
and you’re miles away out of touch

would things have changed at all if i shut my mouth
would things have changed at all
would things have changed

now we’re far apart
we’re separated
you hurt me bad
left me so jaded
at first i was numb
love was overrated
i never wanted this

i thought that i was fine now
haven’t seen your face in years
don’t know whether i want to
somehow you still bring me to tears

i don’t know why you would do this
i know it wasn’t your fault
and i saved you but did i really
now i feel so small

would things have changed at all if i shut my mouth
would things have changed at all
would things have changed

now we’re far apart
we’re separated
you hurt me bad
left me so jaded
at first i was numb
love was overrated
i never wanted this

i couldn’t keep silent
never been good at quiet
i guess you couldn’t hide it
i ran away, i ran away
and you still haunt me to this day
can’t the memories just fade away

would things have changed at all
would things have changed

Duuuuuude that's hella good man. The line 'never been good at quiet' kinda hit me harder than the others for a lot of reasons, but over all, i love the flow it's got and the lyrics make me want to cry kinda

thanks and also yeah i cried while singing it and figuring out the chords and stuff

Yo, just came up w a little thing

You are my moon, You are my sun
You are the stars Inside the night sky,
And, baby, you’ll find out,
That you make the world worth living

It sounds p good with the melody, but this is all I can really share rn

i like it! :)

Thank

thanks and also yeah i cried while singing it and figuring out the chords and stuff

Tears are healthy and they just show how much raw emotion is in your work. Emotion is the fuel for great art!

This is probably crappy but here

Dear Celestial (yes, you can call me celestial or starlight)

Dear Celestial, it'll always be the same
Broken hearts are not a game
Broken girls still have a brain
Broken me remains the same

Remember when she kicked you out?
Alone, trapped, and in doubt?
Pick me up and dust me off
Still like me? I think not
Take me away, break me down
Call me names, she hates me now

Hate how you were insecure
Hate how you couldn't find the cure
Hate how you crave affection
Hate how you starve for a connection
Hate the fact you were always strange
Hate the fact you knew only pain

You were always a ghost to me
Never thought my past could affect me
Maybe I was a stranger to you
I really just thought you knew
I needed relief, not this pain
Screaming, screaming, screaming for change

_{I've written a few songs… but not as good as y'all. Mostly it's new stuff, not very good tho.}

show us show us show us show us

I guess I can pull up my stuff. It isn't great though. Give me a few minutes.

you're biased because it's your writing dude

Oh probably. But I can tell ya, there's better music out there.

(Sense when?- by me)

I heard something
Recently
I didn't really believe
So tell me if it's true
Do you
Really love me? Cause if you do-
Sense when?
Sense when?
I really love you, but you loving me-
Sense when?
Sense when?
I really don't believe, do you me?
Sense when?

So maybe it's all a joke
Just to raise my hope
But I don't really care
I just wanna know
Is it true?
Cause I love you.
And If it's true
I just got one thing to say
Sense when?
Sense when?
Sense when?

Cause I really love you

Sense when?
Sense when?
Sense when?

Sense when?

(What do you think?)

It's good! It's got a simple chorus, which is really nice and often refreshing, especially to someone who can't write anything that isn't packed with so much symbolism it's barely even a present sentence. I am curious though, do you mean since? You used sense, but I'm not sure if that's the proper word?

face plam yup that's exactly what I meant. I literally wrote it in the middle of the night, so I obviously wasn't thinking.

And thank you!

fgfhghjgf don't sweat it man, i do the same thing all the damn time. but it's great otherwise!! and np, im glad to help!!!!!

Hello, I have a song I'd like to post:
Father Please

Every little piece
of me
and you
oh father
don't you see
it's all hurting me?
but no,
I want
to die
but I'm too afraid
so I
am stuck
feeling worthless
crying till I can't no more

Please
just please
leave me here alone
but too many things
keeping me here
like love
but not
from you
but another
who makes me feel like I'm worth something

But no
you won't
shut up
and I'm
to afraid
of losing your "love"
so
I stay
and try to behave
but it's all crumbling down
Threaten me again
"I don't
even
care anymore
I'm
growing
colder and colder"
and
I try
and try
but to no avail
I'm stuck in this vicious cycle

Please
just please
just
don't speak to me anymore
"You know I love you"
An intoxicating lie!
but no it's all the same in the end
plaster on a smile
and make it through the day

Oh
father
I'm tired of living
but
oh so much
to live for- ah!
you take
them all
away
again and I'm so
lost
nothing left
to care
for
but him
and you'll
take him away too if you knew
so it's a secret
that I'm in love and he loves me too
Please
ah- please
just
I don't want to hear
Your voice anymore for
it cuts to the core!
but I can't make the outside look
like the inside
without you saying it's for attention

Perhaps
someday
I'll be free
but for now
I'll wait
try not to cry
put on
a brave
face for my friends
never let them know how much it hurts inside

Please
Please
I'm down on my knees
begging for no more!
but no God doesn't hear
the feeble cries
I mutter aloud

and so I'll have to get by somehow

that's actually really good-

thanks!

It really is!

thanks, this song means a lot to me

please critique mine i really think it sucks and nyaaah