Here at blue duck studios, we will give you at least three, very different opinions on your characters, plus some free character art (we are a little out of practice, so be warned). Feel free to send us as many, or as few characters as you want. We will reply within the week, if not sooner. All we ask is you check out our squad here: https://www.notebook.ai/forum/characters-board/please-critique-our-characters
and leave your feedback! Thanks a ton!
-The Blue Duck Team
I suck at character critiques but I'll try to help you.
Hello! I am working on the drawing of your character at the moment, and I am wondering what style of mask you picture Blood wearing? Is it the classic superhero mask or something else? Thank you
-The Blue Duck Team
Would love to see what you can do with Ombre. Ombre Lyons
Hi, this is so cool of you to do!
Can you maybe do one (or both, your choice) of these two?
(He would probably just wear some dark jeans and a grey sweater or something)
Thanks! I love seeing how others interpret my characters, though I can draw them myself
Hey @Sir Silver! We are just messaging once again to ask what colour the cape is? We verified what type of mask you were talking about when we read it once more. however, is the helmet like a motorbike helmet or more like a fencing helmet?
Thank you for your time!
-The Blue Duck Team
@rachel
Hello! We will do what we can! We will respond A.S.A.P once we have everything ready!
-The Blue Duck Team
Awesome can't wait!
@Celestial-B
Greetings! We will probably do them both because they are rather interesting Characters, and we will do them once we arrive there.
-The Blue Duck Team
Hello! I'm very interested in your critique thing you do with characters, I don't usually use notebook.ai a lot but I still have one character who I'd love to have drawn and critiqued. In the notes area, there's all the background knowledge and things about her that might add more detail to the drawing.
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Thank You So Much!
-Finnly
@Finn
Thanks for being interested in our critiquing. We do have a ton of work to do now, but we will get back to you ASAP.
-The Blue Duck Team.
Dear Sir Silver,
We have finished our critiquing on your character and we have completed the drawing with a few design choices done by us when it came to the helmet and cape (Which if you dislike those choices we can easily fix them.) in order to give you the drawing, we require your email in order for you to receive/view it
Blood-Rapture/Luke Lionhard
Brooklynn: I love the concept of the Luke’s power. Like how he changes the blood to the universal type, or is able to change it into water. Something you might want to consider is clarifying whether or not he can use his blood as a weapon. In the backstory portion, there's the comment that BR used his blood as a weapon, but it isn’t stated as a talent. I think it would be super cool. I can just imagine an epic fight scene where the bad guy takes Luke's weapon, and is like “it’s over Blood Rapture. Give up, or die”, and Blood Rapture, who’s bleeding, just laughs. to He raises his arms, a thousand blood droplets, that are razor sharp rise up, and fly at the guy. It would be great if you could expand on the extent of his powers. Can he suck up other peoples blood in order to sustain himself? Can he use his powers as Luke? One thing I’m confused about is the relationship between BR and Luke. Do they know the other exists? Are they friends? Or did they start as enemies, and progress into friends? I think by answering these questions, you could add some real depth to the backstory. Another thing I’m curious about is the way he’s quiet. Is it in a brooding way, or in a polite way? Something I really liked was how you were able to tie together the backstory to most of his “nature”. You were also able to create a character who rose up against all odds that’s not a cliché. A lot of the time we see a character who was abused in the past, and fights back by becoming a well known superhero, sharing their story to kids all over the world. What you did with Luke is so cool. How he lays low, and helps in small ways without drawing attention to himself. All in all, this was an incredibly unique and quite frankly, awesome character to read about. Thanks for sharing!
Delta: I really love the concept of your story, especially with the powers you’ve given this character, I think that it will be an extremely interesting plot. I overall love your character however a few things that may make him a rounder character would be to add some more flaws. He only has one emotional flaw and everyone on earth has way more than one flaw, I could list at least 5 off the top of my head about myself. I truly love the backstory, and that he has two different personalities, one being a darker persona and one being lighter yet still keeping that dark side. Lots of characters that have multiple personalities only have the light and the dark. I was wondering how and when BR comes into play? Does he come in when Luke is in danger? Is Luke able to call BR at will? All in all this sounds like an amazing character and I am quite fond of him.
Tallinn: As stated by the others above me, I am quite fond on this take of multiple personality disorder (MPD) seeing as moments of trauma are usually what causes someone to develop another personality. The power reminds me a lot of when Katara used blood bending in the last air bender (pardon me being a loser), which I find is a very interesting power, especially adding the fact that he works at a blood donor clinic which would be a good place to practice his powers. However, when it comes to him turning blood into O-, I think it would be a good thing to include him turning it into type AB due to it being the universal plasma donor which is just as important as the universal blood donor. Another thing is when it comes to those who suffer from MPD, it tends to be because they as people are mentally susceptible to an outside or inside influence, even to the events following them taking on another personality. This would be a recommended flaw as to stay true to the rules of reality in addition to the rules of fiction. There are a few questions I have when it comes to the backstory such as, Why did he get give the power to manipulate blood? Was it a luck of the draw system or something the terrorists designed?
-The Blue Duck Team
Sir Silver:
If you want your email to remain personal, you could send it to us privately, or we could upload the drawing to this forum. Let us know, as anything works.
-The Blue Duck Team
This is my baby Lucas. Thank you for doing this!!
Thank you again!!
@TheMusicalVampire
We were studying your character and noticed that you didn't state an outfit that your character wears. could you please add an outfit or communicate one to us through this forum? Thank you!
-The Blue Duck Team
@blue Duck
He wears a black oversized hoodie, black pants, and black high top vans. He also has a pair of large, deep blue, glasses.
Thank you for doing this!!
@Finn
We were wondering, when you say that Megumi wears a Flannel jacket, do you mean that it is made out of the material named flannel, or that it was the classic red and black flannel over-shirt?
-The Blue Duck Team
Sorry about responding so late! Thank you guys so much! You gave me a lot to consider and change to help flesh out the character some more. You can just send the drawing to [email protected] Thank you again
Thank you for replying! We have sent to image to your email using our own, with the title Blood-Raptor. We look forward to hearing the critiques you have for us as well.
-The Blue Duck Team
Selene Anisha Hey guys!!! She's not completely done yet but I really need some advice on where I could improve on her as a character, that and the fact that I really suck at drawing and would love to see what Selene looks like. I added what she wears into the notes section.
Hey guys!
Sorry for the backup on reviews, one of the computers in charge of drawing is broken and can't draw anyone currently. We have quite a few reviews done so far, just waiting on the drawings.
Again sorry for the inconvenience, the problem will be fixed as soon as possible!
-The Blue Duck Team
@rachel
We are done critiquing your character! The drawing is almost ready, again since the computer is down, but hopefully we will be able to send it to you soon!
Brooklynn: The first suggestion I have is to add more mannerisms. They don’t have to be big. Small things make the character more realistic, like she doesn’t cover her mouth when she yawns, or she cleans under her fingernails when she doesn’t know the answer to a math equation. I love the flaw. You can go so deep with that, and it has the potential for a lot of conflict. One thing I would suggest is giving Ombre some negative personality traits. You mentioned that she used to get stressed easily, but she overcame that. What other internal challenges does she face? It might be cool if you include a note about her being into science as well as tech, because cooking is a science, and you could make a connection there. Up to you as always. Something I was wondering when I was reading about Ombre was how did she get into demolition? It seems a little random, and a little out of character. I would suggest making another character who likes demolition, and make them friends. Their relationship can spawn from Ombres interest in techy weapons, and his/her interest in bombs/blowing stuff up. Overall, Ombre sounds like a very relatable character, and I hope this advice helps!
Delta: As someone who is a large part of the LGBT+ community i loved her backstory, so I may be a bit biased towards her. I would like to see a little more development on the mannerisms and flaw department. Also, where do her faults meet her strengths? Like if she’s social is she painfully trusting of others? What does this cause?
Tallinn: I personally am a fan of many of her aspects, especially her being part of the LGBT+ community as there always needs to be more mainstream books including characters of the community. However, I recommend you add more than flaw due to the fact that characters, like people, don’t have a single flaw. They could be small things like she’s not organized, she’s constantly late, etc. Or they could be bigger things like she a pathological liar, she’s a kleptomaniac, etc. The larger ones obviously don’t really fit with her character type but you get the idea. In addition to her liking Tech., it would be beneficial to add math to her likes, or at least something she’s rather intelligent in, due to the fact that maths is a large component to hacking(since it’s mainly numbers) When it comes to her personality type, I would recommend adding some negative ones that go hand in hand with her positive tropes and her backstory. For example, does she have a hard time opening up to others or taking her own advice? Does she struggle with admitting she’s gay to new people because she’s afraid that they will take the news like her parents did? Or does she feel comfortable enough with her identity that she can go around saying it and not be phased by others reactions?
-The Blue Duck Team
Thank you so much! I will for sure be adding more to her character.
Hi! Could you please critique my character? I'd also love to see how her costume turns out. Thanks in advance!
Hey, I'm here to apologize for the delay in replies, we have spring break at the moment and one of our members is vacationing with their family. We have also been having computer problems on one of the ones drawings are being made on, so once again, apologies. We shall try to get everything up and running, but this is just notice
-The Blue Duck Team