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She could find them after walking for a while looking for the others

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Tenley smacked her commute ovation device one last time before giving up. "Its no use, this thing is never going to work. Your heavy but landed on it." Tenley glared at her brother

Liam took the device and after messing with it for a bit, he gave it back "use it now, it should work." He watched as his sister called another girl, Ava was it?

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Tenley smacked her commute ovation device one last time before giving up. "Its no use, this thing is never going to work. Your heavy but landed on it." Teblsy glared at her brother

Liam took the device and after messing with it for a bit, he gave it back "use it now, it should work." He watched as his sister called another girl, Ava was it?

(Can you please fix Tenley’s I spelt name please? It’s bothering me a lot…. and welll… the line of dialogue not inclosed in dialogue.)

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(It’s in clear if Ava was it? Is a line of dialogue or not. Just saying….)

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(Got it!)

Ava jumped when she felt a buzz on her arm. "O-Oh! I-I think I'm getting a m-message from T-T-Tenely!" She exclaimed. She tapped it to look at the message.

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(So here’s a tip for you because I can never tell what’s dialogue and what’s thoughts. (Stark) So when there is a though inclose is, with the * things. Or whatever. I’m not writing an example because I’m completely out of it.)

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(But it was like o e of those internal thought thingies that osnt really a thought, idk how to explain it but whatever.)

Tenley heard faint crackling sounds then heard the words "…h-hear me?" She tapped the device against some rocks and the thing crackled again "Ava?….hear me?… stuck…beach….cavern." she spoke but only part of what she said went through

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Ava's eyes widened. Stuck? Was Tenely stuck? What happened? "Tenely! I can't hear y-you! What h-happened? Are you a-a-alright? A-Are you h-hurt? Is a-anyone injured?" Ava asked into her ear piece. Can Tenely even hear me?

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Tenley twisted a few wires and heard Ava's voice. Tinkering with the small device again, she spoke up "Liam and I… information… on the run…went to the beach…fell inside a hole and now we are stuck." She said, her the devices broadcasting better now.

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Yuki peered his head up, looking over at Ava. “Is something wrong Ava? You look a bit sick….” (Oh look, I made a pointless entrance for Yuki.)