forum Creating a Comic!!! Please Help Critique!

Started August 11, 2019 by @shattered_heart

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^^Thanks.
I see your point. What if you made all this happen in one or two more… what do you call those? Ima say “pages” (because panels are the little ones, right?)

15, I would end with a last shot on her troubled face.
18, Maybe I’m wrong here, but in my experience with dying the tears don’t come at the beginning. Sometimes randomly, but mostly at the end.
19, Drama I know, but why doesn’t he drive?

1. I like your suggestion.
2. I feel you are right with this one as well, as looking back I feel the tear takes away. To be honest, I am not experienced with death. I didnt know my grandfather enough to be very upset, it was more of a silent acceptance of life.
3. To be honest, I never even considered a car. I think I left that out as he was walking home when he ran into Jordan so he didnt actually have a car with him. And he was too anxious to waste time and just ran. But you kinda have a point, I guess.

You could ignore the last bit for drama. But someone would eventually ask that question.
Maybe have something before to show that the hospital is in walking distance? Maybe while out with Timmi have it in the skyline.

You could ignore the last bit for drama. But someone would eventually ask that question.
Maybe have something before to show that the hospital is in walking distance? Maybe while out with Timmi have it in the skyline.

Sounds good. I did kinda picture it as a kinda smallish town for some reason, but yeah, I could definetly make it work. One question though thats been bothering me, what quote do you suggest if I have a quote at all?

Quote for what?

Oh, have you read to the end? The story was originally going to have a quote on the last page, but I wasnt sure if it like took away from the story.

Oh yeah. I’m not sure. It helps sew up the ending. I might try blending them to get one.

May this…

“Time is short. One of these days you will either say, I wish I had or I am glad I did.”

May this…

“Time is short. One of these days you will either say, I wish I had or I am glad I did.”

I dont know why I never replied to you on this. I felt the urge to continue with it and came back this discussion.
But I really love the quote.

Well I am glad you like it. How are you?

@The-Althalosian-lsNotLikeOtherSquirrels
I'm okay, sorta. Thanks for asking though.

What about you?

I'm alright. I have to do a lot of work for college. On good news, I have a friend back. (My ex wanted to be friends again which is awesome.

I am happy to hear that.

I am the opposite right now. I am quitting my study and have lost the last few of my friends, lol. It was my fault though.

Oh schist I'm so sorry.

Oh schist I'm so sorry.

Haha, it's fine. I was never good at keeping friends anyway. And I am going to start studying somewhere else. The previous study was really strict and stressful.

Sorry to hear. What was it on?
And also last night at midnight I finished the lot of work which I am slightly proud of.

Sorry to hear. What was it on?
And also last night at midnight I finished the lot of work which I am slightly proud of.

I do childcare and you have to either have a cert III or a diploma. So I decided to do a diploma, as I already have a Cert III in Business Admin. But it was ridiculously hard. My mum ended up telling me to change to a different training group as I was getting really bad dermatillomania over it. I am still not studying though as the process is still ongoing. But it has been so good not feeling the stress.

Thumbs up👍! What do you study?

On a bright note for me, a friend of three years got back to me and said they still want to be friends 😊. It's kinda funny as we have never met. We met on a writing site and became good friends. We dont know what each other looks like or even our ages. And we only told our real names for the first time. It is honestly a so beautiful and rare friendship.

I see. I too have much to study. The finals are here for me.
That's really great. Do you reckon you will be able to meet up?

Unfortunetly, probably not. I live in Australia and he is in Hong Kong.
Besides, our friendship is kind of a whimsical one. Since we have no faces, I guess we are not afraid of opening up to each other. I think we are both scared that it might change if we met.
It would be wonderful to meet though. Maybe one day, we will. But until then, I guess we will just keep it as it is.

Ah, that's too bad. Luckily most of my close friends live in the same state as me. Maybe when you're adults. How old are you?

I am actually 18. I dont know his age but I suspect early 20s.
It's just that it isnt an easy thing to do. But yeah, maybe one day.

I'm gonna be twenty this year. It's… whack. It's so weird. I feel so unprepared.

I have been 18 for 3 months now, but I still dont feel it. It's almost like time is rushing by and you are getting older, before you even realise it.
I always get surprised when I meet someone older than me here. A lot of people seem go be in their mid-teens.

Yeah. A lot of kids here. You sort of have to sift through to find the good ones. Most of the core “cool kids” are decent writers from what I can find.

I dont really interact with anyone. I'm too shy, lol. And after all that's happened lately really put me off it. But I have seen a couple of people about that come across as pretty decent.

Lol not shy at all. Neither irl or here. I've even got everyone angry at me multiple times. But luckily I'm a charismatic soul so it never lasts. But I haven't done a lot of work recently either. What have you gotten done?

I have always had social anxiety, although I am a lot more relaxed online than irl. I am slowly getting over it, but it isnt something that just disappears entirely. Haha, I wish I was charismstic. I am a rather Eeyore sort of person.

Work as in actual work, studying or writing? Or as in working with relationships? To answer all four, I am still working full time (I am a casual), got into studying again and have wrote to my friend to say thank you for the last 3 years of support and love, and yes I would love to continue being friends, after me telling them 3-4 months ago, I needed a break from any sort of relationship.
As for my writing and stuff, I drew several drafts of the next scenes for this comic. As for writing itself, I came to a stand still. I finally finished my book I have been writing since I was like 12, but havent edited it yet. But then I started writing 2 books at the same time, which is kind of hard, but I cant pick a fave. Then recently I came across a concept board for a story I had. I had a brief description and a list of character names and pics of how they look, but no info on who had what role in the story. I am intruiged by the idea, but have no clue on where I was going with it. So now I am really cranky with myself.

Good for you. You gotta hold on to your good folks.
What are you studying? I can't remember asking you this before.
Nice on the comic work. Whoa you finished something! Congrats, dude!
Lol I feel that. I have so much stuff lying around.