forum Mary Sue/Gary Stu Challenge!

Started March 29, 2018 by Deleted user

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Simple. Think up a Mary Sue or a Gary Stu and tell me who they are. It can be an original or from a fandom :)
I am already feeling the cringe!

Fandom is Harry Potter
Name: Persephone Malfoy
Age: Immortal
Looks: To put it simple, she is a metamorphmagus
Personality: Really bubbly and light. Everyone one loves her even Snape.
Powers: Every power known to wizard kind. Wandless magic, veela, etc, etc..
Other: She is dating Harry Potter and even Ron likes her.

Here's a character I made –unironically- when I was like 11.
Name: Serene Ocean
Race: Faerie
Appearance: described as being very tall with extremely long lashes, under a mass of smooth, bright red hair" (it grew like that naturally of course). She had smooth, sparkling rose pink skin, and gigantic butterfly wings. She also had "immense, deep blue eyes." Her voice was also painfully beautiful.
Personality: I honestly can't tell. She said things like "Do not dare to fail remembering me, Ehanae!" so it's kinda unclear. If I were to describe her, I'd say…uh…commanding? Mature? Gentle? I honestly…
Powers: I think she's immortal. She can also fly, shapeshift, and if I remember correctly, lots of other types of magic. Unstoppable, essentially.
I'm sorry you had to read this

Here's a character I made –unironically- when I was like 11.
Name: Serene Ocean
Race: Faerie
Appearance: described as being very tall with extremely long lashes, under a mass of smooth, bright red hair" (it grew like that naturally of course). She had smooth, sparkling rose pink skin, and gigantic butterfly wings. She also had "immense, deep blue eyes." Her voice was also painfully beautiful.
Personality: I honestly can't tell. She said things like "Do not dare to fail remembering me, Ehanae!" so it's kinda unclear. If I were to describe her, I'd say…uh…commanding? Mature? Gentle? I honestly…
Powers: I think she's immortal. She can also fly, shapeshift, and if I remember correctly, lots of other types of magic. Unstoppable, essentially.
I'm sorry you had to read this

I think Im sorry too. But it's a good Mary Sue. If that makes sense (o_O)

@writelikeyourerunningoutoftime Tbh, that was the best thing I ever read and i would enjoy reading a parody story with that kind of character in it. That was like…peak early-2000s era writing right there lmao

Percy Jackson Mary Sue:
Name: Sequin Marquette
Godly Parent: lol u thought it wud be Aphrodite, but u r rong! Haha its Artemisand dont tell me she cant hav kidz!! becuz she birthed sequin!!!! If u say utherwize ur a trol, go away!!!1111
Appearance: tall and skinny but she’s also curvy and has hair and eyes that change color constantly (haha u thought only aphrodite kids cud do dat!! uwu)
Personality: she’s sarcastic but nice, smarter than all of Athena cabin put together, everyone luvs her!!!!!! She can build or fix anything, she’s immortal, her dad wuz a king so shes a Princess!!!!! And she’s always happy all the time!!!!
Powers: all of da powers, and she’s dating Nico!!!!

(I apologize in advance for all of the spelling, I was just trying to write like Mary Sue authors often do. They also ship every OC with Nico for some reason? He’s like 14 and he’s gay, so….not a very good choice for your ‘miraculously beautiful’ 19 year old protagonist.)

I haven't read Percy Jackson (I will) but my best friend has and I have a good idea on the do's and don'ts of percy jackson oc's :)

Percy Jackson Mary Sue:
Name: Sequin Marquette
Godly Parent: lol u thought it wud be Aphrodite, but u r rong! Haha its Artemisand dont tell me she cant hav kidz!! becuz she birthed sequin!!!! If u say utherwize ur a trol, go away!!!1111
Appearance: tall and skinny but she’s also curvy and has hair and eyes that change color constantly (haha u thought only aphrodite kids cud do dat!! uwu)
Personality: she’s sarcastic but nice, smarter than all of Athena cabin put together, everyone luvs her!!!!!! She can build or fix anything, she’s immortal, her dad wuz a king so shes a Princess!!!!! And she’s always happy all the time!!!!
Powers: all of da powers, and she’s dating Nico!!!!

(I apologize in advance for all of the spelling, I was just trying to write like Mary Sue authors often do. They also ship every OC with Nico for some reason? He’s like 14 and he’s gay, so….not a very good choice for your ‘miraculously beautiful’ 19 year old protagonist.)

cringing

Just a random Mary Sue:

Name: None
Age: Infinity!!!
Gender: None, they're everything…
Personality: they're EVERY SINGLE PERSONALITY! They'll reply to questions multiple times because they has soooo many different answers. They're dumb and smart, optimistic but pessimistic, and everyone loves then
Looks: the most beautiful thing you have ever seen, but you have no idea if they're a boy or girl. Also, they can change their looks at will.
Powers: Every power known to man
Other: Anyone who looks at them immediately falls in love with them

Just a random Mary Sue:

Name: None
Age: Infinity!!!
Gender: None, they're everything…
Personality: they're EVERY SINGLE PERSONALITY! They'll reply to questions multiple times because they has soooo many different answers. They're dumb and smart, optimistic but pessimistic, and everyone loves then
Looks: the most beautiful thing you have ever seen, but you have no idea if they're a boy or girl. Also, they can change their looks at will.
Powers: Every power known to man
Other: Anyone who looks at them immediately falls in love with them

no. just ….. no

Just a random Mary Sue:

Name: None
Age: Infinity!!!
Gender: None, they're everything…
Personality: they're EVERY SINGLE PERSONALITY! They'll reply to questions multiple times because they has soooo many different answers. They're dumb and smart, optimistic but pessimistic, and everyone loves then
Looks: the most beautiful thing you have ever seen, but you have no idea if they're a boy or girl. Also, they can change their looks at will.
Powers: Every power known to man
Other: Anyone who looks at them immediately falls in love with them

no. just ….. no

Yes. Just yes.

I'm going to do another one because I just remembered the one I made up when I was 9 or 10.
Star Taren
Age: 15, I think? Or 16.
Gender: Female
Looks: ocean blue eyes, smooth perfect caramel (yes, caramel –my cousin and I loved food comparisons for skin tones) skin, full lips, long curly auburn hair, long lashes, never wore makeup because she "doesn't need it"
Personality: quiet and shy, but when it's necessary can be bold and witty, extremely intelligent, learns everything fast, beautiful and authoritative, natural born leader, charming, interesting
Powers: can wield a magical tiara (i'm sorry) that unlocks basically unlimited power. I think it was fire, and like telekinesis, but I don't remember
Other: everyone loved her and called her beautiful 24/7. She had a guy who worshiped the ground she walked on. she was a princess of an island called Starlight (yeah…) and fulfilled some sort of prophecy.
yikes

Name: Maya (I can't remember her last name
Age: 15( i think)
Gender: Female
Looks: Black hair, fair skin tone (smooth), emerald green eyes
Personality: Sassy but really nice and has a sweet heart
Powers: She is the last species of her kind because the rest were all killed. (Her kind is really powerful in her kingdom)
Other: She fulfills a prophecy and marries a guy who is the son of the most dangerous guy in the kingdom but the son is good. :)
This is a character off a story that my friend and I was going to write and then we realised that the main character was a mary sue. (The things she did made her one) Because there are multiple species in a magical kingdom and we made one up and they all got killed by the rest of the kingdom because they were too powerful. Especially if they turned evil. (The evil father is an evil version of Maya species.) This probably doesn't make sense or seem like a mary sue but she is and I can't feel bothered to go into full detail. (n_n)

Name: Diamondstar
Age: 70 moons
Fur: Rainbow and white
Eyes: Rainbow
Rank: Leader
Clan: All of them
Mate: Everyone likes her, but her true mate is Firestar
Mother: Half Moon
Father: Jay's Wing
Sons: Thunderkit (oldest), Windkit, Skykit
Daughters: Shadowkit, Riverkit, Starkit (youngest)
Backstory: Diamondstar was sealed away at birth because she could fly and spit fireballs and teleport. She was awoken by Firestar and he loved her instantly and they made babies instantly and she convinced Tigerstar and Brokenstar and Scourge to become good.

Name: Katya Garnett Madison-Shepard
Gender: Female
Age: 18, but she looks older, and all of the hot guys from your favorite fandom's are falling for her as you read this, the girls too.
Looks: Absolutely flawless, she doesn't need makeup, because she woke up like this, and she doesn't exercise, but she's fit as hell.
Personality: She's the boldest person ever, but still somehow the shyest person ever, she doesn't have any flaws and all of her actions are sooo justified, nobody ever argues with her, and she's always right and never loses, she can act, and play eight instruments, and uses a naginata, but she somehow doesn't get shot despite the fact that she fights against opponents who use assault rifles. And you have to like her because she's flawless.
Powers: Questionable omniscience, omnipotence, and omnipresence, but she usually doesn't use these powers.

Name: Katya Garnett Madison-Shepard
Gender: Female
Age: 18, but she looks older, and all of the hot guys from your favorite fandom's are falling for her as you read this, the girls too.
Looks: Absolutely flawless, she doesn't need makeup, because she woke up like this, and she doesn't exercise, but she's fit as hell.
Personality: She's the boldest person ever, but still somehow the shyest person ever, she doesn't have any flaws and all of her actions are sooo justified, nobody ever argues with her, and she's always right and never loses, she can act, and play eight instruments, and uses a naginata, but she somehow doesn't get shot despite the fact that she fights against opponents who use assault rifles. And you have to like her because she's flawless.
Powers: Questionable omniscience, omnipotence, and omnipresence, but she usually doesn't use these powers.

I am cringing SOOOO bad!

As is the point. Duh.

shuriken that was so good my word.

I'll try one:
Name: Felicity Grey
Age: just seventeen but already government-overthrowing material (also single and ready to mingle with no need for parental consent)
Looks: skinny and curvy at the same time, probably has stick arms that could lift a car if need be, and don't forget the GREEN sparkling eyes
Personality: not confident in herself at first (look ma! I added a flaw to make her seem real!) but then those two guys tell her why they're in love with her and everyone seems to be constantly telling her she's important so she gains confidence real fast… and uh… who actually cares about all the rest of that in real life, you know? Details, details.
Other stuffy stuff: can do literally anything in no time (optional: short training montage), the villain is lowkey obsessed with her and wants her to join their cause, and everyone else can't help but love her so they drop all of their own goals and dreams for HER goals and dreams (all willing to give up their lives), but she doesn't seem to notice (so the readers won't notice either right???)

Lol, this reminds me of this one article that said Rey from Star Wars was a Mary Sue and I was like, 'Um, no…. not really.'

Good job 'key. My turn to make a male one!!!

Name: Ryker Lipton Tobias (Two first names, one of which is his last, name, just like Paula Smith's character.)
Gender: Male
Age: Hard to tell.
Personality: Stoic. (Mary Sue code for a brooding edgy, emoboi like Sasuke.) But wait, he has a flaw, he's endearingly clumsy, unless he's doing something important, in which case, he can do three backflips in a row and land on one hand while simultaneously cutting people down with three katanas, one of which he weilds in his mouth!!! He also, like Katya, is SOOO justified and is never wrong, and never ever loses, and will lift your main like he lifts three-and-a-hslf tons at the gym, even though he's just a human.
Looks: Undescribably handsome, sparkles in the sun.
Other: He can beat an omni-being even though he's just a human because he's BAT– oh, wait a second.

Name: Turquoise Neko Glitter Kawaii Desu Sparkle Bubbalicious
Gender: Female
Age: 17, but looks WAY more mature! (Me: cringes)
Personality: Quiet, super loud, horrible at everything, good at everything, the nicest person ever, super mean, REALLY smart, stupid, hates romantic stuff, desperate for love
Looks: Long flowing rainbow hair, color changing cat like eyes that are usually turquoise, cat ears
Other: She's perfect at everything! uwu

shuriken, "because he's BAT–" I died laughing

Demi, that personality tho

Your praise is well received, thanks 'key.

Haha of course, twas funny

Percy Jackson Mary Sue:
Name: Sequin Marquette
Godly Parent: lol u thought it wud be Aphrodite, but u r rong! Haha its Artemisand dont tell me she cant hav kidz!! becuz she birthed sequin!!!! If u say utherwize ur a trol, go away!!!1111
Appearance: tall and skinny but she’s also curvy and has hair and eyes that change color constantly (haha u thought only aphrodite kids cud do dat!! uwu)
Personality: she’s sarcastic but nice, smarter than all of Athena cabin put together, everyone luvs her!!!!!! She can build or fix anything, she’s immortal, her dad wuz a king so shes a Princess!!!!! And she’s always happy all the time!!!!
Powers: all of da powers, and she’s dating Nico!!!!

(I apologize in advance for all of the spelling, I was just trying to write like Mary Sue authors often do. They also ship every OC with Nico for some reason? He’s like 14 and he’s gay, so….not a very good choice for your ‘miraculously beautiful’ 19 year old protagonist.)

gods…oh gods…why??? and thank u for the pint about nico…on pinterest i see like hc for thalico,reynico,rachico,etc and im like..NO he is GAY. STOP. WHAT ARE YOU DOING TO MY BABY BROTHER HES FINALLY HAPPY WITH WHO HE IS STOP RUINING THAT. but its a really good mary sue type of charecter

Oof I have another Percy Jackson one:

Name: Tanya Jones
Godly Parent: Kronos himself! She's his only daughter- besides the other gods and stuff, but they're not important. Chiron is her brother!!
Appearance: She's like the most beautiful person ever. She has blonde hair and golden eyes, and she looks prettier than Aphrodite
Personality: Super smart!! She's also really brave and stuff, and she's so nice that everyone loves her!! She's basically a goddess, but she chose to be mortal so her mom could still teach her stuff!!! She's way better than Percy!! She also loves to be happy and nice, and no one cares about her daddy!!
Powers: She's the most powerful demigod of like, all time!! She can do anything and even Mr. D knows her name, because she's like his aunt and stuff. She also dating Percy, Luke, Nico, Jason, Leo, and like all of the male characters except for Frank, because he already has a girlfriend and Hazel is like her best friend so she wouldn't take him, and her boyfriends are always fighting over her because she's so cute!