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I will critique your characters!!! Will tell you what I think without holding back! Have any questions just ask!! You have any questions?? You can contact me on my Discord!!! GinjaNinja#3214
@GinjaNinja Ok
1: He just doesn't have eye… He has empty sockets… he sees through hearing and smell… sound makes an outline for him and smell allows him to see colors and vibrant details… Which one or both gives him basically a 3D image of everything around him
2: If he doesn't SEEM op comparativly that's mostly just because he doesn't ACT op or like most op characters (Arrogant and such) because he has a better understanding of the world around him then everyone else… Also he's supposed to be op because of other peoples op characters…
Thanks again,
-Claw The Veni/CTEW
Edit: Oh and Claw Ta Ach Pootamsa is Ra (aka the Language I'm making) for 'Power Of The Warrior'
@Claw_The_Veni
Oh.. well that does make more sense.
And thats what I was struggling to describe!! He doesn't act like he is OP.
But that does clear up a few things.
That actually seems pretty cool though.
Any questions you know what to do!!
–GinjaNInja
@Claw_The_Veni No! I agree that we should not talk about it on here, But I still want to hear more about your story! So would you be apposed to me creating a private discussion on here? Or? If not that is ok!
Ayy tysm for the critique and i'm glad u like Alphy qwq.
Ye, u can sorta use that quirk if u want,i i'm still working on it myself qwq in the meantime, here's the 4th protag qwq. She's probably the most incomplete, but imma give her a try qwq
Dude thank you so much??? Don't worry about taking your time, real life is important!
The funny thing about your ballet paragraph is that Noah is the least talented/capable dancer in the group, he has to work twice as hard to keep up, thankfully their lead dancer Levi is patient with him so it's all good. But yeah no you would never put "dancer" under one of the things he's great at haha.
One of the reasons I love writing Noah is because he has such a plethora of emotions that make him very outwardly complex, that he doesn't juts bottle everything up, which obviously can make for a very interesting character as well! But not what I'm going for with him. So I'm glad it's noticeable!
You are so sweet to my boy wow, I did work on him A LOT so I'm really glad that he's well-received! And creating characters that are well-developed and interesting has,,,, always a bit of pride point of mine, so thanks for soothing my ego haha. You honestly flatter me, I'll come back to you with other characters from this universe if that's alright. Thanks again! :-)
@Kohaku
Alrighty I will probably definitely use it!! Thank you!
Now for Phoenix
I am just going to say this now. I already Love her for her hair color. Am Also a red head.
And she is a witch. Even better.
Chewing nails is a serious nervous trait. I have seen a lot of people, myself included, that do this when nervous. As well as the walking around while thinking.
I feel like I can relate to her on a spiritual level. XD. I can also enter smart ass mode easily.
She has an interesting hobby. That's pretty cool honestly.
I honestly love her personality type. Bravo.
I love her view on Politics. XD.
Okay I seriously have to say this. There is so much in common that I have with her. I have the red hair, I can become a smart ass in no time flat, I also can seem to be a bitch sometimes, But I can also get really emotional, and my favorite color is also Black, and my favorite food is also Ramen. XD I love this so much… BUT I don't like Ferrets…Sorry
Good for her to go out and be herself! Even if it is against her parents wishes! You want to be a traveler?? YOU DO YOU!!!
What the heck is going on with the Napkins tho??
With this character she is very well created. You did a good job with her.
Nothing I see that needs improvement. She is wonderful.
Have any questions?? You know what to do!!
–GinjaNinja
@Darkblossom
Sure thing!!
YES! Okie I know the perfect solution!!
It says that she is a seriously good at strategy board games. You wanted a way to make her a not total scaredy-kat but without the cliche "Fierce Side". So she can be shy and hesitate when it comes to a lot of things. But you can also have it that when she makes a strategy everyone is kind of in awe because this skittish, mousy, hesitating, and nervous thing is actually really good at creating strategies. And it would work because since she is not always on the "Front Lines" as others would say, she is always observing things and so she knows all the ins and outs of a lot of things. so maybe that would work? And since she is a strategist and she is good at drawing, she can be given a description and she can sketch a base! So that way they can know the way in and out if anything goes wrong!!!!
Like she may be nervous but she makes up for it with her wicked strategies!
Have any questions??? You know what to do!
–GinjaNinja
@Kaloobia
Yes you can definitely come back and I will gladly help with another!!
And hey man- I am just stating the facts here.
You honestly did a very very good job with Noah. I already love him.
Have any questions?? You know what to do!!
–GinjaNInja
@Claw_The_Veni.
Hey man. I have been trying to log onto this freaking website for the past 30 minutes.
But i cant talk for a while!!! I left my phone at my house and am currently on the road. I am using my moms!!! Just wanted to let you know!!! Am super sorry!!!
–GinjaNinja
Bro you're seriously too sweet haha, but I'm taking you up on that offer: here's Leo, another member of the boyband. Leo Mun
Thanks again for doing this! :-)
Ayyy tysm ahhh >o< I'm honestly glad you like her, most of the times she seemed so one dimensional, i didn't know how to develop her better qwq. As for the napkins, it's actually a thing from me (try and bite a napkin, u'll want to throw up right away, trust me)
Again, thank you so much q3q Would you mind checking him for now? i finished him a few moments ago, a little rushed but i hope it's good enough qwq
@Kaloobia
Leo,
With his hands he could totally be a Piano Player. Imagine how crazy his fans would go if he looks like THAT and plays Piano?? They wouldn't be able to handle it.
…His Prejudices tho… HoW On pOiNT…i'll go home..
Oh well it says he can play several instruments so there you go with the Piano.
I love what his favorite weapon is.
He is very committed to his Education. That is also amazing.
Okay.. DUDE- HOW THE HELL- You are honestly amazing first of all. Your ability to make characters so-…I have never seen something like it. You make it to where the reader has something to relate to, and that right there my friend is an amazing feat in of itself. The fact that his goal and mission in life is to pay his mother back for everything she has ever done for him. And the fact that his life while growing up??? AMAZING.
It is a great way to let the readers empathize with the characters.
Love the pictures in his gallery.
Love him. He is just like Noah in the sense that he needs nothing changed. I feel as though your characters are gonna have a lot of people that love them. They have that thing about them that a lot of people can relate to them. Honestly amazing.
You have any questions? You know what to do!!
–GinjaNinja
@Kohaku
Trust me, I know. You bite one of those things??? WTF WHY?? Its the same with clothes and cotton balls for me.. I HATE it when people chew on their clothes. Absolutely terrible.
Elwin,
HE IS AN ELF-
…How is everyone so freaking good at making characters????
He is amazing. I see absolutely nothing wrong with him.
You did an amazing job with creating him.
I think that he is a character that readers will fall in love with. Even if he is a side character, he will be a liked character.
Good job with him!
Have any questions? You know what to do!
–GinjaNinja
Dude you're way WAAY too nice to me omg?? I feel so shiny and flattered and confident haha, I'm really happy you like him so much :)))
If it's alright I'm gonna drop off a character that I haven't worked on NEARLY as much, haha, please find SOMETHING I can improve on ^^" Lilanie
She's a lady from the same universe, she's more of a supporting character than anything else but she has her own side arc and everything, so.
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