I'm not sure if this is appropriate place to ask this, but I have a character trusts people too easily. Would that be put under the "Flaw" section or somewhere else? Just curious.
No it's fine! I'd say that trust in itself is not a flaw, but to be naive and easily fooled or tricked is. So essentially, if you wanted to put that under flaws then I would use naive, or 'easily tricked', or something along those lines :) also, I'm glad that my questions helped some!
Hey! I'm sorry that it took me so long to get to you. I am intrigued by the character "Discord" as a whole. I like the character design and the personality traits! But you might want to consider making them a little bit more vulnerable. First let me give you an example- when I first made MY main villain, he was just undefeatable and he had no weaknesses whatsoever. But as I developed in story-telling, I decided that it isn't as realistic when they are just powerful and undefeatable. I don't know if Discord is a villain, or if they even are undefeatable, but from what I read, they seem to be a bit stacked with power- and that's not a bad thing, don't get me wrong! It's great to have a powerful character that just brings the whole 'awesome' vibe to everything, but everyone has a weakness or two. Not weaknesses as in flaws in character, but as in: what is a way to disable this power? Think about any villain from any movie or book. (I'm using villains as an example because that's the vibe that Discord gave me, but feel free to correct me if its not accurate) The hero had to defeat them somehow. In the 2018 film Venom, all of the symbiotes were incredibly weak to fire and high pitched frequencies. Of course that is an obscure example but it could be something as little as that, or it could be something much more complicated. Whatever the case, I think it would be a good idea to add some vulnerability to Discord! overall, they are a great character. I love their looks and their style, and I love where they're headed! Good job!
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Hi, thank you for the feedback, I really appreciate it. Discord is an anti-hero more than a villain. They do bad things for a good cause sort of. I wanted to say that, due to the corruption that is spreading throughout their body, they are always in extreme pain, and using their magic amplifies that pain x2. Is that a good enough weakness? Also, in my story, Discord isn't defeated, they end up getting what they wanted and basically winning. Thanks again
Hi, thank you for the feedback, I really appreciate it. Discord is an anti-hero more than a villain. They do bad things for a good cause sort of. I wanted to say that, due to the corruption that is spreading throughout their body, they are always in extreme pain, and using their magic amplifies that pain x2. Is that a good enough weakness? Also, in my story, Discord isn't defeated, they end up getting what they wanted and basically winning. Thanks again
I can totally see anti-hero! and yes, that is an excellent weakness- also, I love it when people defy clichés and make anti-heroes or villains win! it's unique and interesting. It's been my pleasure giving feedback :)
Thanks again!
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Hi, could you critique my character Ray from what she has so far? Rayle Anderson
Fascinating character! I like his style and personality! Here's a few recommendations I have: This one is a small one, because its not as much about his personality or his abilities, but about his build! I love tall characters, and I love that you gave him broad shoulders, but realistically if he is that tall and if he has muscle mass and broad build, he would weigh more around at LEAST 200-210 lbs. Also, I love that he has flaws, and the 'being cast from heaven by God' thing is really intriguing! It reminds me a lot of Lucifer (Satan). But if he is the antagonist, (you probably know the answer to this already, but you might want to write it down) is he going to win, or lose to the protagonist? If he wins, great- that defies stereotypes! But if he loses, you might want to give him more weaknesses, because if he is immortal and his only flaws are being a gambler and being overprotective of his lovers (and also not knowing when to stop), those are more of sins/personality flaws than they are weaknesses. A weakness would be like (this is just an example)- Every full moon he is mortal and therefore he can die, so he hides away until morning. Something like that! Even if he DOES win the fight between protagonist and antagonist, he still needs to have some weaknesses, because how else would the protagonist put up a fight? But overall I like him! he has lots of personality and I would definitely be interested in knowing more about him! Good job!
This character is very interesting! I like that she isn't perfect and that she kills like a demon would and I especially like how she has the outward appearance of good in public but she is truthfully very chaotic and unstable.
Also, I love how many little warped/demonic details you sprinkled into her character! Wanting the government to collapse so that she can kill, the adrenaline rush that she gets when she kills, and even the tiniest little detail of liking her meat bleeding! That shows to me that she really does enjoy blood and gore.
Also I love how she slowly turned into what she is now, it wasn't something that she already was, and it wasn't something that happened suddenly. She was abused, and her father is probably the main reason why she kills. I love this character! great job.
Hi, could you critique my character Ray from what she has so far? Rayle Anderson
Hi! I love Ray's character! I really don't have any tips or bad things to say- you've got her personality and her flaws down. She's got a fun personality and I'd love to read about her.