I have most of the major points really plotted out and written for my story… but theres just some parts that are really short and vague but I don't know what to add? Some of these times are when the main character is living with the poorest people in her city and she was born in to a very high-class family, but it's more of a transition time, also later when she ends up as a indentured servant at this manor?
How did she go from high-class to living with the poor people?
Give some more backstory? I'm not really sure how to help if I don't have much to go off of…
Well… she's the daughter of someone in power…. I haven't decided who yet. One night she's out with her brothers and some friends and theres this assassin who shows up and kills her brothers, and he was intending on killing her too, but he made a mistake and got someone else. Liliana (main character) doesn't think it's safe to go home so…
Kind of different from what you were asking… But if I were her, I'd call the police and try to get bodyguards, not hide away with the poor. The assassin might find me again and I'd be defenseless. Or does she try to contact someone who will help her but in the meantime she hides with the poor for the first day or so?
So this is set in something similar to 1700s London, so there is no way to really call the police, everyone thinks she's dead, and the day after the attack, her father goes into hiding, so she can't find him either.
Ohh okay. No way for her to get bodyguards?
if the assassins are targeting her family due to their high social status, she wouldn't be able to return home and she most likely wouldn't be carrying around a fortune. So, she can't contact her family, she's alone and has no money, describe her decision process towards deciding to live with poor people. Also, if they're poor they probably wouldn't want to have an extra mouth to feed, so describe how she goes to multiple families asking for temporary shelter until she comes across maybe an old lady? Her children moved out decades ago and her husband recently died. She's all alone and is willing to provide shelter, but she's poor so your character can only move in if she somehow makes enough money to provide food for both she and the old lady. She has no other options, so she goes looking for a job. She can't get a good paying one so one day she decides to steal a little food for the days dinner when she gets caught and becomes an indentured servant. Really describe how she's treated, go into detail on how the job changes everyday and leave out monotonous duties like washing dishes, etc. unless one day while doing boring job there's a plot twist like the assassins show up or she's suddenly demoted/promoted. Talk about her relationship with the old lady as well as her relationship with other characters, especially if this is a relationship that is against some sort of law. The thing that I am confused by is how she hasn't been noticed. From what I can tell she's from a wealthy and famous family. Wealthy and famous families have wealthy and famous friends, friends that live in manors. So after the whole initial disaster she cant go to any of these friends because who knows who is actually her friend, but now she's at this manor. Do the residence not know her? Why not? Is she hidden from all guests? Why? You really need to decide how all aspects of your plot fit together without confusion because it currently has a lot of holes.
So yeah, you're actually almost spot on! I really like the idea of having to steal some food… YOU HAVE SAVED ME THANKS
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