forum POEMS post 'em here my friends!

Started February 07, 2019 by @ember-chan-will-never-forget-you

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that reminds me of hanamaru's cover (or original??? i'm not sure) of turing love
it's a good one
i recommend the song-

but yeah the poems good too !

(I decided to just post the thing now and run hahah)

"Saturday"

I love you, I love you
you're the broken glass to the wine
the liquid slips between the cracks
one and two drops at a time.

My hands stain red with the glass
the carpet turns red with a splash
I cry, and I cry on the scene of the crime
and tears fall from my eyes with a single painted lash.

Please don't leave me with this
please don't, please don't call my name in vain
and bring me to your bedside
just so I can leave peonies by your name.

Tie-dyed dresses and false memories
of us spinning slowly through the city park
and you held me close, told me you loved me.
In truth, I was always alone; dancing in the dark.

The liquid slips between the cracks
and tears fall from my eyes with a single painted lash.
One and two drops at a time.

loving all the paragraph poetry! and @fuyu the repetition to create rhythm in saturday is stunning.

(i cannot tell if that is negative or positive feedback?)

(AmAziNg!)

(i cannot tell if that is negative or positive feedback?)

(AmAziNg!)

(oh thank you! that is very sweet)

Aaaaa….my brain doesn't know how to process giving feedback on things that I like. But, I love your syntax and use of line breaks as well as indentation. Gives it,,, you know,, the ~aesthetic~
I'm probably making no fucking sense

no i know a bit what u mean. i like it when my poems are poem shaped

Oh thank goodness. As long as I made some sense that's good.

"Moonlight Macabre"

By the horizon line, dusk turns to dawn.
And even as the lights die down, the parties rage on.
Lovers share kisses under the moonlight as the stars
stand right in front of them. And lonely birds go back to rest
upon treetops that caress them like death once had so gently.
Their tweets and chirps ring out in the lonely hollows.
They cry and hold themselves in the ghosts of their lovers' wings.
Sad birds weep, they always do
underneath the moonlight where they were out-shined.
But sad birds still sing.

I love I LOVE I LOVVVEEEEEE

ty <3

that title

Is that a good or bad thing?

very good

:D

the imagery, wow. first thing i noticed— the nail polish coming off; is that like a metaphor for moving away from the idea of femininity? how you've composed the almost ?remorseful glimpse into the sun-drunk past, visions before the arising; the becoming. i thought about it all day.

oh wow that is a high tier compliment man. ye, that was what i was going for with the nail polish.

You did a great job with the prompt! I'm no good at giving detailed compliments about poetry because my brain always konks out and tells me I'm stupid. But if I could I certainly would.
And with that said I was going to post here but have most definitely decided against it now.

I'm sorry…
I'm not who I said I was
I'm sorry…
That I led you on
I'm sorry…
The happy, bright, wonderful, laughing version of me you got to see every day
wasn't real… I know how badly you wanted it to be
I mean
I did too

You did a great job with the prompt! I'm no good at giving detailed compliments about poetry because my brain always konks out and tells me I'm stupid. But if I could I certainly would.
And with that said I was going to post here but have most definitely decided against it now.

n o?? pls post what you were going to i want to seee >:(