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Aw.
As if Dear Evan Hansen wasn’t sad enough, now I’m more sad.
The steady rhythm accents the melancholy tone well, and it continues through the whole poem and not just the end of the stanzas which is really really good and not annoying and I hate it when it doesn’t do that.
Anyway.
The poem is absolutely not trash. In fact, it’s a very good poem. It’s got a style, theme, rhythm and a rhyme scheme
(Hehe). Plus, it’s emotional.
There’s not really anything wrong with it technically, but stylistically it could use some stuff. The biggest thing is that it doesn’t really grab attention. If I saw that poem in a group of others, I probably wouldn’t give it a second glance, which sucks because there’s a lot of stuff that can be gained from a second glance. I’m not sure how to advise you on that though. Just keep writing. Also reading, that’s helpful too.