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Started December 20, 2019 by @Reblod flag

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We've all got 'em so why not share the suffering?

Oh ho ho ho ho, I’ve got one for SURE. This is a fairly old one so I don’t remember everything but here we go! Basically,

A girl is at a castle ( I never decided how she got there ) she and the prince become good friends. ( and of COURSE start to fall in love ) Then OH NO! The prince was poisoned and is in grave danger! She must find out what it is and save him. ( it’s totally not like the king has the best doctors in the land who could probably figure it out ) So of course she gets the antidote and saves his life! ( did I mention the princes mom is dead? ) So then they REALLY start to fall in love, but then, the princes evil brother ( who was like, hardly there at all throughout the whole story ) kidnappes the girl! ( for some reason? ) So the prince rescues her ( and kinda evens out the whole saving your life thing ) AND THATS IT, they kiss and that’s the end.

Wow, has my writing got just a little better ( I hope XD )
I hope you enjoyed the cringe-fest!

Guys, I just found a notebook that has the beginning of my story, are you ready for this?

The prince is lonely :( so his dad, the king, makes a kingdom wide search for the best friend for him. ( perfectly logical, instead of, like, telling him to hang out with his brother ) But everyone who comes to the castle is only interested in money or prestige. Then the king hears about a young girl who is an orphan ( that’s right, just full of cliches wasn’t I? ) and she’s totally awesome, so the kings like “ Ya sure I don’t have a problem with an orphan whom I don’t know being friends with my son, they seem happy.”

Just WOW
( I also found a scene where the prince is all sad cuz him mom died and he’s like “ You wouldn’t understand! “ and she’s like, “ DUDE I’m an ORPHAN! “ and it’s just amazing

Alright I'll try to sum it up, it's a bit confusing though.
(Also, It's bad)

So, it starts with a kid he lives with his mom, dad and brother.
His mother has a job that requires the family to constantly move, so his father home-schools him (the main character), the brother wanted to attend public school.
The kid starts getting letter int he mail from his dead grandfather. who was the first person he came out to. (he's trans. the main character not the grandfather).
The kid is sensible but also filled with grief. So, he sends a letter back. His grandfather sends one to him replying to his letter, it tells him (the MC) to grab a candle, a knife, a rope, go into a room no one else will be in for awhile and whisper some special words over and over until he falls asleep. (I never chose which words)
He does this going into a closet in the basement. No one goes in the basement.
He sits on the floor, lights the candle and starts whispering.
His eyes start burning. glowing golden liquid flows from them.
Then he passes out.
He then wakes up naked under a sheet. (which causes all kinds of terrible feelings) He sits up and looks around, he is in a plain room, there are dozens of tables like the one his is sitting on, they all have bodies on them. People come into the room and escort him out along with two other kids who also woke up. He is taken to a room, like a hotel room. He is locked in the room. later around three hours. he is escorted out, there were clothes in a dresser in the room. He was taken to a dining hall with a long table. there was a regal looking woman sitting at the head of the table and a mischievous looking boy sitting next to her. there were also the two other kids he saw being taken out of the room he woke up in. The queen (the regal lady) tells the three kids (the MC and the two other kids who woke up in the room) that they have awoken as a sign of the dwindling health of the land. They are called harbingers, and they are the reason the world is about to be destroyed. The queen tell them there should be four of them. She calls in an old adviser who has lived through many Harbinger plagues. A boy who look about fifteen comes in. He tell the queen that there must have been a mistake, the last one hadn't taken the bait. The adviser says that the best move would be to go to the second world (earth) to retrieve the last one. The queen tell the Harbingers to sleep, they will need to be asleep to go back. So he wakes up back in his world, still sitting in the locked closet. but now he must find some person he knows nothing about. also he has no idea where they could be. luckily, the adviser decided he needed to go into the other world too. he knew they came from different places and that it would be extremely difficult to find the last one, also he needed to make sure none of them tried to get out of it. The adviser goes to meet each Harbinger and get them all to the same place so they could find the last one. they end up find out that the last one had died without doing the ritual that lets them in. so the last one couldn't be used. The all go back to the world, where the queen says that they will just have to go through with it as usual, without the last one. But the MC starts having serious problems, problems that had started from the beginning bout only now are to hard to handle, there has been an infestation in his mind, one of the creatures crawled through his ears into his brain and now is a part of him, this ting take the form of a teenage boy who bosses MC around and flirts with him. MC finds it terrible, he feels the thing is feminizing him and distracting him. The thing started out as thought he couldn't get out of his head and slowly formed into a full body person who he could feel and smell and all the senses. But no one else could. MC could go on like that. he had to get rid of it. But the ritual was coming up and he hadn't told anyone about the creature. He ended up telling the adviser about it and the adviser tried to advise him on how to deal with it but it was getting too late and the creature was too strong. but the creature started to actually care about the MC so the creature wanted to stop draining him but MC had to open his mind to let the creature out but he couldn't. And ritual day was like tomorrow. So he went to the ritual with the other harbingers, they were finally told what would happen at the ritual. They would be sacrificed. His mind creature holding his hand telling him it's going to be okay, him terrified but too shocked to comprehend any of it. the Harbingers were sacrificed. The MC woke up in his world, waking up from a world he would never see again. He sat down to breakfast with his brother and father. He started hearing a voice in his head, it was the creature it was, some how, with his still.

I had like three more books planned. But never got around to it. Sorry this is so long and I bet I made some errors. It's one in the morning. And it was originally in all three of the Harbingers' perspectives, but I thought that would take too long, I could brief their personalities.
One was tall and muscular, he liked painting his nails and making jewelry, he had social phobia so he had no friends. He laved hanging out with his little sister though.
Two was the comical relief. With teal hair and an obsession with ninja. they were gender fluid and lonely. they wanted to find a partner. or just someone who could love them, their parents stopped caring about them and their only friend moved away. they had been sleeping in an abandoned car in a Walmart parking lot.
Also the adviser was a dragon, the older dragons get the more they look like classic dragons. There is a whole bunch of lure about the dragons alone, but it would take too long to say.

( I also found a scene where the prince is all sad cuz him mom died and he’s like “ You wouldn’t understand! “ and she’s like, “ DUDE I’m an ORPHAN! “ and it’s just amazing

Holy schist that's beautiful.

Hey everyone!
Oh, boy. Let me start by saying I have TREASURE TROVES. Time to dive into my old wattpad account.

There's one. Another story I wrote that I sadly do not have anymore, it was a post-apocalyptic story about a girl who lived in a walled city, being told that there was nothing past it. Her father told her that it wasn't true, disappeared and was never heard from again. She was told that he had gone mad and died out in the wastes, but she refused to believe it was true so she came up with a plan (that I think I really brushed over cause I was like seven when I wrote it) to escape the city, so she does and she finds out that there are three other cities like hers, and others who escaped like her, and they told her that there's a fabled fifth city to the north that for some reason was better? I dunno. So, they travel there, one of them nearly dies and she finds her dad and they all live happily ever after. I think that's how it went anyways.
It's kind of fun to see how much you've improved over the years. Looking forward to seeing other people's stories. 😂😂
—L.C.

Oof.