forum Please Critique This (short) Scene I Wrote

Started January 17, 2018 by @Masterkey

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I'd be happy to edit things too. :)

Alice, great!

I loved it.

Its a solid start with promise. I'd like to know about the setting of the story, but I understand that this is just a segment.

I'd love to see where this goes! Keep going, even if you get tired of it.

@Masterkey sounds great! I always love editing more than actually writing, personally. I find it more soothing and I like the fact that I don't have to start by building all the worlds myself, I can just help people make them better!

I'll keep going, I've got so much plotted out with too much detail to quit now.

And yeah, me too disney. Editing comes more naturally to me (not as easily for my own work though), but I want to write just because I want my stories to be real, ya know? I want to be able to read them, and I want others to enjoy them, too.

@Masterkey yeah, I agree. Sometimes I wish I was better at writing because I want these worlds to exist but I don't want someone else to write it because they'd do it wrong but I don't want to write it myself….

@disneyfanatic7 I get what you mean. I want it to be my own world and I want to be able to do it and have it be mine but I also don't want to do it because I feel like I wouldn't be able to make it as good as it should be.