"then I kissed him on the lips at first he was a little surprised but then instantly kiss me back he licked the bottom of my lip asking for entry when I declined he grabbed my ass and squeezed it I gasp and he slipped his tongue into my mouth as we both fought for domain and of course he won as I pulled apart Breathless he put his forehead on mine "damn babe" he said Breathless"
Wow. And I thought I wrote like crap.
Wait didn't the title say something about good grammar and writing?
I come bearing a gift by request of Crocs
A Stereotypical Wattpad Badass Story Without Proper GrammarTM
if you're talking about my message
fought for domain
I dunno about you but I go to school in a different vehicle every day
on the first day I went on a motorcycle
on the second day I went on a rose gold ferrari
this book is so relatable
in other news, i am claire now. i've decided it
"guess who showed up if you guess Claire then you're correct congratulations "Hey baby want to ditch this whore and come with me so we can have fun"Claire said trying to be seductive but sounding like a dying horse in the process" no I rather not get STDs"Alex said as I start dying of laughter"what the fuck are u laughing at bitch". "I'm lauging at this skank that's right in front of me oh wait that's you"I say with sass"
trying to be seductive but sounding like a dying horse in the process
Me
a 16 year old who lives alone lmao
"I think Alex was actually scared lmao "What the fuck was that" I ask afteer I feel some wetness on my ass "Umm I think I just pissed myself" he says embarrassed to admit it ( Jk he didn't piss himself but that would be pretty funny if he did)"
shoot it's over :(
its too short. i was very disappointed in the fact that there wasnt more to occupy my time with
"he held me by one foot off of the balcony. I look up and saw that his eyes were going black and that's when I got curious."
"he held me by one foot off of the balcony. I look up and saw that his eyes were going black and that's when I got curious."
Past and present tense in one sentence.
I'm intrigued.
You're being held off of a balcony by a dude with black eyes and you become… curious? Good choice.
"I kept punching him in his face not listening to all of he cracklling of his bones breaking. I felt hands pulling me back and holding me down. " Get the fuck off of me I need to finish him.""
I'm so sorry lmao
"She went to hit me but I blocked it and slid back jumped up and punched where her heart is in her chest she died instantly."
"he held me by one foot off of the balcony. I look up and saw that his eyes were going black and that's when I got curious."
Past and present tense in one sentence.
I'm intrigued.
These are the examples people should use when they say "don't give your reader whiplash"
"She went to hit me but I blocked it and slid back jumped up and punched where her heart is in her chest she died instantly."
Okay that's not how murder works
the president of gangs
Welp gotta go guys, I'm being summoned in a fanfic
"I got out my phone as fast as I could to call the president of gangs."
sneeze the prESIDENT OF GANGS IS HERE TO SPEAK WITH YOU-