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@gracehustle

I've been staring at one thing for hours debating on making it more than a short story

You should! I have to now create some awesome characters and find good names for them so I might disappear for a little bit

@Knight-Shives group

The Water
The water rushed in my lungs, cold and fierce. the darkness spread through my vision. I was losing my consciousness, I knew I was. No fear. No regrets. No thoughts of hope or success. I was going to die. I felt the water invading my mouth, my nose, my ears, I could not get away from it. This is my grave, my watery grave that i was cursed to never leave. I managed to stay up a little but the waves pulled me down not wanting me to go. Sirens. In the distance, but too far. Not close enough to help me I was going to die here, There was no hope left. The darkness engulfed my vision and everything was black. This was the end.

Light Flooded my vision, too quickly. I was in a bed but I still felt as though I was in the water still. My body felt like jelly. The room was sterile white and plain. there were voices nearby in a hall maybe, but I could not make out the words. Two people were sitting across the room one on a couch the other on a chair, but both asleep. I had a migraine and my lungs hurt, when i breathed deep they burned. But I still had doubt that this was real. I was probably still in the water, in my watery grave. Dead.

@Lady_Loki

The question, if you could have any fictional item, what would it be?

Palantír.

Who knows what this is?

That thing is bad luck if you don't know how to control it right. (This is Loki talking. Lexi went to do something and left me alone. DON'T TELL HER.)

@Althalosian-is-the-father book

The question, if you could have any fictional item, what would it be?

Palantír.

Who knows what this is?

That thing is bad luck if you don't know how to control it right. (This is Loki talking. Lexi went to do something and left me alone. DON'T TELL HER.)

Well true. But that was only because Denethor’s was caught and influenced by Sauron’s magic.

@Knight-Shives group

This is all I got so far.

A man of germany wished to rule over all of the continent Europe. He with help were going to do it. This man asked another man of the Soviet union to help him in his tyrannic overtaking. Together they invaded a place of the name poland. Successfully they had taken it, though the people of this land had friends, allies, of another land the lands of Britain and France. Together the rulers of those lands declared war on the lands of Germany and Russia. With the land of Poland now theirs they continued taking over, the Soviets split up to fight against the people of Finland, even with their resistance against their rule over them. The man of germany sent his masses to take over more land the lands of Norway and Denmark, successfully they were taken. With each land that was enslaved the man was closer and closer to his goal of domination and dictatorship.

@Shuri-the-Floof-Doggo

It kind of gets ramble-y from the start, and there are capitalization errors too, but y'know what? I like it. It's good for a piece of exposition!
Also, try to show more than tell. However that can be difficult with exposition so I'm not too big about that.