forum Want me to critique anyone? I'm game

Started March 06, 2018 by @@Rubyjane

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Could You critique my character? If you aren’t too bogged down with other requests? https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/367874#overview_panel

@Ozera Katara
I liked the changes you made on all the characters!!
Nozomu:
What kind of flashy clothing does he wear?
Why doesn't he want to go on dates with some of the girls he flirts with?
What makes him like Ryoko?
Does he always choose to make people feel better? If not, why?
Mikay:
How long is her hair? Her lower back? Her rear end?
What does Mikey do when she is angry, sad, happy, or disappointed?
Why does she want to hide her feelings?
So she's a know it all? Is there anything else about her personality you could add?
Is there a reason she hates all animals? Did something scary happen with animals when she was a child?(Ex: a scary animal licking her face when she was a child and being traumatized ever since)
Who is Zack?
I hope I could help!!

Jane Taylor
Is his hair simply black? Any highlights or maybe lighter roots or tips?
How short is his hair?
Does he get sunburns a lot?(I know there isn't a spot for that, just a thought)
Where are his tattoos?
I love his personality!! Maybe just expand on the things you have, why exactly does he walk three paces behind? Does he have any specific things he absolutely refuses to do even for his sisters?
What is the other job that he has?
What kind of magic does he have?
Very very interesting character!! I hope you continue to develop the character!!

I grant you a character!

Thanks in advance!!!

Whoops, this was supposed to be the third

Moonlit Silver Knight
First, wow! Your character was so creative!! I've never heard of anything like that.
How long is his hair?
What shade of green? Emerald? Muted?
Is he always traumatized? Is he ever happy, sad, or angry? If so what does he do when he feels those things?
Why did the people want to kill him seeing as the experiment worked?
Over all I couldn't find anything else, you seemed to have thought him through very well.

@3abbie3
I couldn't find anything, sry I couldn't be more of a help:)

I've actually been working on Zack, I'm just no where near finished. And thank you, I'll adjust these as needed and update you!

So, this is Lucas again but, he has been changed and added to a lot. Thanks!!

@TheMusicalVampire
So much better!! Good job!!

Hi!! I've been posting these bbs all over but I think everyone is shying away from the multitude of links. I realize it's a lot so you don't have to go super in depth or do everyone if you don't want to!! Thanks in advance!! :DDD

Seraphine: Seraphine Des-Marais
Michelle: Michelle Gerard-St. Clair
Alfonse: Alfonse Gerard
Estelle: Estelle Gerard-St. Clair
Elias: Elias Gerard-St. Clair

@CinnamonRoll
Sure, I can do them very soon. Oh btw I'm Markus' creator and about meeting Everleigh, I haven't developed her enough to where I'm really comfortable sharing her.

Mind if you critique mine

Zoe: Zoe Melana

@CinnamonRoll
Seraphine:
No middle name?
Why is her smile fake?
What does she do when she's angry? Or scared?
Water magic, how interesting.
Michelle:
Are her nails always painted white?
What does she do when angry? Sad? Excitedly?
She seems really sweet and maybe a bit perfect. Does she have any other flaws?
Alfonse:
No middle name?
(He sounds cute)
Why was he poisoned?
Estelle:
What does she do when she's excited? Happy?
Why doesn't she use magic all the time?
Elias:
What does he do when he's happy? Sad?
How does he help the resistance?
Sorry this isn't much, but I hope it helped a bit!!

Could you critique mine? I mean I'll be honest it's a joke of a character but I was wondering if there was anything you thought I should add. Thank you so much!
Cownt- Cownt

@@Reiko
Oh my. This is so funny.
Does she have a full name?
She's immortal, is she a special cow?
Any particular shade of red?
Can you add more to the backstory?
I'm not sure there is anything else, I hope I helped. Very interesting Cow. Wow I didn't think I would ever say that:)

@Rubyjane
Thank you! I was stuck on where to go with her now I have a few new ideas.

Hi! Can you please critique my character?

@Nerd_Girl2.0
Oh my goodness, let me apologize!! I didn't see your request, I am so sorry!! I'll do it now!!
No middle name?
Any particular reason why you capitalized the fact that she can't drive?
Maybe try elaborating on each one of her flaw/motivations?
Wat sort of prophesy about her?

Good morning! If you aren't too busy with others in this thread, could I ask you review over my ghostie character? I never know what details to write down, and I thought I'd get a second opinion from a few folks. Thank you in advance lol!

Jaya Hillbaruri Katelyn Ann Tottle Leaf Tak-too Sheik-To Snowpetal If you could check them out that'd be great.

If you wouldn't mind doing another character of mine: Alexei Vladovich Petrov

Hello, would you mind critiquing my two main characters? I would just like some honest feedback, so be as harsh as you want!

Sky I've been working on a set of main characters for my novel for a long time now. I know them a lot better in my head than anything I can write down at this point. I'm interested to see what kind of impression they leave on other people. Let me know if you have any questions.