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…And @MJ-the-Larcenist-Arsonist's Felix!
- I'm a little confused by the sentence "Felix has wide, sparkling eyes that are usually narrowed from his near constant expression of joy"—by narrowed from joy, do you mean the lower lids being pushed up from smiling? Otherwise, his Looks section is great. You really have a knack for descriptions!
oh yeah, I mean kinda narrowed because he's smiling or smirking a lot a;lsdfkja thank you!!
- Really my only critique in his Nature section is to elaborate more on why he has the fears that he does instead of just listing bullet points, but everything else in there looks good; I feel like I have a pretty solid understanding of who he is from it.
thanks! I have a hard time kind of really decided how and why people fear things, so I guess I have to work on that
- Does he actually cheat at poker? Or do people call him a cheater unfairly?
He never cheats, he's just actually that good a;dsfkj
- For his flaws, how do they manifest outwardly? When does he know when to stop, if ever? He likes pushing people's buttons and generally can get good reads on people's emotions, but if he's pushed someone too far and they're getting angry or violent, will he try to deescalate the situation or backtrack? Basically, when does the "bringing out the worst in people" stop and the "saving his own skin" begin?
ooo this is a good point
- Everything else in here is solid, though I'd love to see more on him putting together outfits since that seems like a fun aspect of his character :)
- Both Mannerism sections are incredibly detailed, I have nothing to add for those!
- Social looks good too!
thank you!!! :D
- Not a critique, I'm more so just curious, but you mention WWIV in his History section—how far into the future does the story take place? Or is this more an alternate history sort of deal?
currently in the process of forming a timeline, but it takes place ~200 years in the future
- Is there a reason Felix is allowed out of the Compound and able to more or less live his life outside of it? Do people in the outside world know about Donovan Ent., and is he allowed to talk about it? Does he find it weird or does it seem normal to him?
ooo I should probably create a field on my character pages for this,,,, The Six are basically allowed free reign with permission from Donovan, but everything they ever need is in the Compound so a lot of The Six rarely leave unless they're going on missions. Las Vegas, which is now in Concordia instead of the US, is one of Felix's frequent destinations. Donovan Ent. is a well-known organization (it's like the Evil Amazon of the world right now) that has its hand in every country across the globe. Felix and the rest of The Six aren't allowed to talk about their line of work (but I mean,,, who would want to talk about their assassin job). It's not weird to The Six because it's all they've ever known.
- Powers and Voice are great! My only critique is that Hispanic is not its own accent; rather, Hispanic refers to any Spanish-speaking country. Clarifying what Hispanic country (or even better, what specific part of the country!) his accent is from would be great.
oh, thanks! it's primarily Mexican with a slight Costa Rican flair a;dk;fj
- Also not a critique, but the phrase "emergency glowsticks" being listed in the contents of his backpack just gives me joy.
- Once again, amazing detail when it comes to describing his relationships with his family and others! I am now Jackpot the ferret's biggest fan
- The idea that Felix can't separate love and violence from each other because of his job is super, super interesting!
Thanks for letting me critique one of your characters again! To be honest, I really don't have any major critiques on Felix since he's so well-developed, but hopefully I pointed out at least a couple of things you might add to his profile.
Once again, thank you so much a;ksjdf;la This was epic and thank you, you're fricken epic!
