forum I Will Critique Characters

Started July 14, 2020 by Deleted user

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I'm new to this but I want to get better at giving critiques, and maybe it'll help me with my own characters. Comment and link if you want one!

Helloooo. I'm new here 2 but here's one of mine. He's one of my favorite characters so I'm trying to get lots of different opinions. Sorry that it's not completely filled out.

Okay for Magnus: (And just so you know, I'm known for being brutally honest sometimes, but chances are your character is good).
I like that he's a runaway prince. I have a rebellious princess. You have to be careful with characters like that, though, or else they might get cliche (not saying he is, just to be careful).
Looks are good but could be more detailed, like exact height and weight.
Nature could be filled out more. It doesn't say enough about who he is. Fill out some of the other categories.
For social, you said in politics that he believes what his brother believes, so you should say what his brother believes. What is a Calean horse also?
History is good.
Some of the things in your notes could go in Nature or History instead to make them more filled out.

Hope this helps! All in all I like him, it's just not that detailed yet.

Thank you so much! This really helped. I'll work on those things. A Calaen horse is just a horse variant I made up. They're just bigger and more aggressive.

Thank you so much! This really helped. I'll work on those things. A Calaen horse is just a horse variant I made up. They're just bigger and more aggressive.

Oh cool. XD

I'll look tomorrow.

Can you glance at my kid? <3

Okay for Tex:
The gallery picture is really cool.
Looks are good, but in the picture he has facial hair, and you don't say he did in the looks.
You need a nature section or else I don't really know anything about his personality.
For Social you should expand on what the North is but it's all in all good.
Would be nice to get more history.

For Dakota:
Overview looks great and is very detailed!
I love that there is a whole section for clothing and how detailed that is. OMG This whole character is so detailed.
Looks are also really detailed. It might be good to have a specific weight, but if you don't care, that's fine.
Nature is AMAZING. I'm a little scared of them O.O but the animals thing is very nice and gives them a soft side.
Social is amazing and detailed. I could never live of the grid. But I do like barbecue >u<
History… WOW. Whenever you have this story published, send me a copy plz .o.
Family is really detailed. I love all the animals.
OMG I LOVE that you gave them theme songs! And I love "Paradise," it's such a good song! And the QUOTES XD "I am the traumatic experience," made me laugh so hard.

Wow. All in all, this character is SO detailed and SO amazing. Great job!

Could you critique my protagonist, Maggie?

For Maggie:
I like that she's an anti-hero.
Looks are REALLY good and detailed.
Nature is awesome and SUPER detailed! She's so interesting, and I feel like I haven't seen characters a lot like her before.
Social is great and really detailed. I wish a worked in a sweet shop xD
Would be nice to have a History but she's really good and detailed anyway.

All in all, good job!

For Dakota:
Overview looks great and is very detailed!
I love that there is a whole section for clothing and how detailed that is. OMG This whole character is so detailed.
Looks are also really detailed. It might be good to have a specific weight, but if you don't care, that's fine.
Nature is AMAZING. I'm a little scared of them O.O but the animals thing is very nice and gives them a soft side.
Social is amazing and detailed. I could never live of the grid. But I do like barbecue >u<
History… WOW. Whenever you have this story published, send me a copy plz .o.
Family is really detailed. I love all the animals.
OMG I LOVE that you gave them theme songs! And I love "Paradise," it's such a good song! And the QUOTES XD "I am the traumatic experience," made me laugh so hard.

Wow. All in all, this character is SO detailed and SO amazing. Great job!

Awwww thank-you so much!!!! :D :D I;m so glad you like them ^^ I'll definitely send you their story if I ever get it done, thanks!!
Low-key Dakota's my absolute fave character

Okay for Tex:
The gallery picture is really cool.
Looks are good, but in the picture he has facial hair, and you don't say he did in the looks.
You need a nature section or else I don't really know anything about his personality.
For Social you should expand on what the North is but it's all in all good.
Would be nice to get more history.

I have more characters and working on an entire storyline. You can view all the history and lore I have up to date.

Hey could you critique some characters of mine ?

For Danica:
Looks are really good.
I love that there's a clothing section, and that you give an idea of her outfits instead of saying she wears one thing all the time.
Nature is really good and detailed, but for her sexuality wouldn't she just be bi/pan even if she doesn't label it (since you said you don't know the term)
OMG music section is so cool. I love MCR!
Social is really good and I like the symbolism with the animals.
History is really good and detailed.

For Garret:
Looks are good, I like that you give from the beginning to the end.
Clothing, same as Danica.
Nature is really good and detailed.
Love the music section still!
Social is really good but to pick at spelling errors it's "Turquoise" and "Avocado."
And history (and family) are really good!

Could you do mine if you're not too busy

@Nerdy_Theater_Kid Thank you so much ! honestly her music taste is heavilyyyy influenced by mine (i used to have maybe 5 mcr tees lmaoo). And yea i admit spelling isn't my strong suit :/

For Kenna:
Looks are good, but you should explain what a Seldra Fae is or explain it in history.
Nature is really good and I like how detailed flaws are (I can relate to them xD).
Social is really good and it's great that you have so many characters linked.
History is really good and detailed.

All in all good job!

@Nerdy_Theater_Kid thank you sm! I added a description of the Seldra Fae in her notes. Thank you!

Hey! This is my prince, Theo. If you want to look at him, that'd be awesome :p

For Theo:
Overview is good. Just one question, does G mean gay?
Looks are good, but I am going to nitpick about this, if he's Italian, his name doesn't sound very Italian. Ashton is English I'm pretty sure (I am part Italian though and my last name is Italian so that's probably only why I noticed xD)
Nature is really good.
Social is good, but if he's a prince, it would be good to have a politics section.
History is good, the story sounds really interesting! It might be good to make it longer though.

All in all really good!

Can you critique Nessa… even though I know you already love her XD

Can you critique Nessa… even though I know you already love her XD

Um… MY BBY!!! OF COURSE! >w<
Looks are really good and I love her eye color.
Nature is really good and really detailed.
Social is really good and the berry thing is creative!
History is SO detailed. OMG. Poor bby ;n;
And family is perfect because I love little vampire kitty Snowy TwT

All in all… I LOVE HER!! But you knew that XD

Can you critique Nessa… even though I know you already love her XD

Um… MY BBY!!! OF COURSE! >w<
Looks are really good and I love her eye color.
Nature is really good and really detailed.
Social is really good and the berry thing is creative!
History is SO detailed. OMG. Poor bby ;n;
And family is perfect because I love little vampire kitty Snowy TwT

All in all… I LOVE HER!! But you knew that XD

Lol thank you Juls. ^^