forum I'll Critique your Characters!!
Started by @Celestial-B
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@Celestial-B

@alanye
Sure!

First, Esperanza. What shade of black is her hair exactly (dumb question know lol)? Is it brown-black? Jet Black? Ashy? There are surprisingly a lot of shades of black for us to be unsure. How long is her hair? To her middle back? Lower back? Butt lol? Why does she dislike the kingdom Ublanda so much and why does she want it to fall? What do her earnings her sister gave her look like? What exactly is the 'staff of the ocean'? Its cute how her love interest is the boy who helped her get out of slavery.
Shes a really good and interesting character, good job!

Now, Peter. He seems a bit under weight, by about 10 lbs, so maybe add a bit more unless that is what you were going for. Where does he have freckles? On his face? Arms? Everywhere? His personality is so cute lol, love him. What happened to his siblings that he needs to get them back now? Why does he hate Jericho so much? gasp his birthday is really close to mine ;0. Poor boi, he has a good backstory!

You have really good characters! Good luck and hope I helped some!

@Celestial-B

@SpringofThyme
Of course!

First of all let me just say her drawing is adorable <3. On her skin tone, medium isn't that specific. Medium what? Medium dark? Medium light? In her mannerisms, what does she do when shes happy? Sad? Angry? Embarrassed? Give her a few more mannerisms! I see you've mentioned she can't use magic herself, why is that? Can other people use magic? Is it a common thing?
Shes an interesting character, but don't really see what shes trying to achieve, at least its not very clear.
Good luck with her!

@shadepai

Here's my character names (anyone can critique them and everyone ass plots and extra details if you'd like extra is better in my opinion also if you want to add a few extra characters put them under {added characters} please)

Elizabeth
Megan

(i really need male characters, please help)