forum I'll critique your characters!
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@purpleconverse

Hey there! I've got a character here for you to critique. It's a dystopian novel and I hope you like it!
https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/585766#!

This character could use a little improving…
^In the hair style tab, specify her hair more. For example, how long is it? And what kind of braids does she wear?
^In the body type tab, go more into details!! For example, where is she thick and wear is she thin? Does she have bony wrist or broad shoulders? Does she have a big chest or a small waist? Does she have thick thighs or strong calves? Don't be afraid to throw in some more details!!
^In the identifying marks tab, tell more about her wings. Are they big or small? What color are they?
^In the mannerisms tab, don't be afraid to go all out!! This part is one of the most important of all!! Go into full details! For a reference, write down some emotions (sad, happy, angry, anxious, etc.) and go into details about what she does during each of the emotions she feels. It may take a while but this part will come in handy while writing her character out.
^In the motivations tab, specify how and why each thing motivates her. It'll help plan the story.
^In the flaws tab, naming more flaws would help your readers relate more to your character. For example, naming little flaws like nail biting or fidgeting helps your character be more relatable and real.
^In the talent tab, naming other talents she has besides memory would improve your character. For example, is she a good cook? Or does she enjoy any sports? Is she a good hunter?
^In the hobbies tab, is there anything else she does for fun? Any other thing she enjoys?
^In the personality tab, go ALLLLL out!!! This is the part where your character literally comes to life! Don't be afraid to fetishize her a bit!!
^In the education tab, what grade did she make it up to? This will later help if interrogated

That's about it but i would go over each tab and ask yourself, "Is there anyway i could improve this?" To sum it up, what you need is more details. Don't be afraid to go all out on your character because in the end, you'll need every little detail. Can't wait to see her story unfold!! Good luck!

@Jaq-wants-to-be-Christine language

Hey there! I've got a character here for you to critique. It's a dystopian novel and I hope you like it!
https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/585766#!

This character could use a little improving…
^In the hair style tab, specify her hair more. For example, how long is it? And what kind of braids does she wear?
^In the body type tab, go more into details!! For example, where is she thick and wear is she thin? Does she have bony wrist or broad shoulders? Does she have a big chest or a small waist? Does she have thick thighs or strong calves? Don't be afraid to throw in some more details!!
^In the identifying marks tab, tell more about her wings. Are they big or small? What color are they?
^In the mannerisms tab, don't be afraid to go all out!! This part is one of the most important of all!! Go into full details! For a reference, write down some emotions (sad, happy, angry, anxious, etc.) and go into details about what she does during each of the emotions she feels. It may take a while but this part will come in handy while writing her character out.
^In the motivations tab, specify how and why each thing motivates her. It'll help plan the story.
^In the flaws tab, naming more flaws would help your readers relate more to your character. For example, naming little flaws like nail biting or fidgeting helps your character be more relatable and real.
^In the talent tab, naming other talents she has besides memory would improve your character. For example, is she a good cook? Or does she enjoy any sports? Is she a good hunter?
^In the hobbies tab, is there anything else she does for fun? Any other thing she enjoys?
^In the personality tab, go ALLLLL out!!! This is the part where your character literally comes to life! Don't be afraid to fetishize her a bit!!
^In the education tab, what grade did she make it up to? This will later help if interrogated

That's about it but i would go over each tab and ask yourself, "Is there anyway i could improve this?" To sum it up, what you need is more details. Don't be afraid to go all out on your character because in the end, you'll need every little detail. Can't wait to see her story unfold!! Good luck!

Thank you so much for the tips! The suggestions thingy that was available for a while was making me feel like it was okay to skimp on the details, but I guess there's no excuse for not making a complete profile! I'll be sure to look through Maiyve's profile again soon and update my character.
~Wingdings