-Could use a couple more mannerisms, specifically body language.
-Motivations could use some work. I am a firm believer in having two to three of them, and they should be clear, specific statements. I feel like his is a little too vague. Try https://onestopforwriters.com/character_motivations for more ideas.
-Needs more flaws.
-What are his secrets? His regrets? His goals? I feel like you've got a lot of the core stuff, but he's still missing some pieces.
-Background could use some sprucing up. I feel like I only know surface-level details about this boy.
Overall, a great start, but could still use some work. Happy writing!
-Could use a couple more mannerisms, specifically body language.
-Motivations could use some work. I am a firm believer in having two to three of them, and they should be clear, specific statements. I feel like his is a little too vague. Try https://onestopforwriters.com/character_motivations for more ideas.
-Needs more flaws.
-What are his secrets? His regrets? His goals? I feel like you've got a lot of the core stuff, but he's still missing some pieces.
-Background could use some sprucing up. I feel like I only know surface-level details about this boy.
Overall, a great start, but could still use some work. Happy writing!
Thanks for the advice.
I'm aware that he's underdeveloped and he is by no means done haha, just wanted some criticism to point me in the right direction.
Thank you so much, I'm happy to hear you like Sarus! I'm glad you think he's likable, that's what I was going for. I definitely think he'd care a lot about being accepted, I'll consider adding that to his motivations.
