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Started March 13, 2018 by Deleted user

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@TinyZombieKat

Thanks for your feedback! You certainly gave me a lot to think about :)

Thanks for the feedback! Haha that's so funny that you look like Celeste, I actually based her appearance after this girl I know from school! I used the website www.mybluerobot.com you can create free avatars on it! It's pretty limiting, you can't do a whole lot with your avatar but it's good for simple looking characters! Thanks again :)

@Áibhéalaí

My Gaelic is absolutely terrible from years of not using it but I'm happy to know that others on here speak it! Question- Irish or Scottish? My family is from Scotland so my Gaelic is more from that region.
Tha e math coinneachadh riut!

When your characters are ready please be sure to share them!
Thanks!

TZK

Could you do Markus? It would be much appreciated!! Markus Lane Hill

@TinyZombieKat
Both, ha ha! I'm a native speaker and don't have a favourite, so people are confused when I switch around like that! Here they are:

The notes are really very important, so be sure to check them out. Their weapons are listed above, and if you're interested in checking out the significance of their names, go here: https://www.notebook.ai/forum/characters-board/does-anyone-else-use-descriptive-names-that-describe-your-character-s-personality
All other info is listed above. I have a full cast of 15, I'm sure you'll see all of them sooner or later!
Tapadh leat!

To confirm, each of them has a divine parent. In classic Irish mythology, gods/demigods tend to age faster, both physically and mentally, so Calum's mind at ten would be more like seventeen.

I got more!

Here is my child Lucas. Thank you!!

Can you critique him please? I'm not very descriptive so sorry in advance

Thanks in advance!

Hi! You've already looked my character over, but I've made a few changes and I was hoping you could do it again.

(One thing you suggested was to have her not fall into the Batman/Superman trope, and I haven't really mentioned it in the character page, but trust me, she gets mad and hates her pseudo-job at times. The first chapter is basically her complaining about how she always has to bail people out - in nicer terms, of course lol. Her main inspiration for becoming a superhero was her foster mother; she's basically following in her footsteps, and her hero work does take a toll on her social life, so hopefully that fixes the whole trope thing.)

In addition to the one above, can you also look over these three?

Ethan: Ethan Grant
Luke: Luke Steele
Kellan: Kellan Styles