forum hey can you judge my character? thank you

Started April 01, 2018 by @sharkfinn_ey

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https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/388804#! here she is, judge her hard haha. her pinterest board can be found in the notes section if you're interested.
thank you!

First impression: wow what a fruit freak XD

She seems good so far! The only things I'd say are work on her motivations a bit more. What does she WANT in terms of what's going on in the plot? Meaning, how does what she want tie in with what the story is about? Also, does she like anything other than space and fruit? Usually people will have multiple hobbies and likes and dislikes, what kind of stuff does she do for fun?

This is pretty good as an outline. I'd recommend going through and adding more detail to certain points.
Maybe try adding things like why she likes/dislikes/does things, what in particular she likes/dislikes/does about something that she likes/dislikes/does, etc.
Give more reasoning, otherwise you have a person who can do a bunch of things or likes a bunch of things just because they can. If you have reasons as to why your character likes a certain thing then you have less work to do when it comes to motives, personality etc.

Thank you both for your reactions! I'll add more 'why's' and hobbies. Because of the plot hobbies are quite limited, since they're in space and all that, so that'll be a hard one.

Well you don't necessarily have to add more hobbies, just add more interests. Say she not only loved fruit and space, but she loved drawing fruit and space as well. Now that they have limited supplies, she can't just use up their paper (I have no idea, that's probably a bad one but I think you get the idea?). Or maybe she has a favorite book that she talks about all the time? Or a favorite song/band that she listens to? Or a LEAST favorite team member on the crew? The reason why Notebook.ai has sections for random "favorite" things (color, animal, possession, etc) is so that we can figure out WHY. So if you just start making a list of these likes (AND DISLIKES), and then figuring out why she likes them or dislikes them, that'll start making her seem more like a real person with real ideas who can make decisions based on how only she thinks or feels about something, not just on "logic."

I love your character I feel I could really connect to her and I haven't even read the story, I like that her name has a deeper meaning, i also think the idea of making characters in pintrests boards is hella cool. I'm also bad at critic but I love Rout, she bomb.