so, I'm describing someone's voice, and I don't just want to say that her voice was rough but she spoke so smoothly, not a stutter or a moment of hesitation because I just don't want to do that (Idrk why I just don't, it doesn't seem right). So instead I wrote "her voice, a combination of sandpaper on silk and" but I don't know what should come after the and. So pleeeeaaaasssseeee help me!
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I'm thinking this might not be the best place for so much metaphorical talk. Silk has a reputation of being smooth, as in the actual vocal quality and not how fluidly someone speaks. I think you might be better describing it as "like sandpaper, but with an air of confidence," or something along those lines. It'll add more clarity as to what you're talking about. Feel free to bounce more ideas off me!
Wait, what does she say next? It would help.
you could do something along the lines of "she spoke clear and confidant despite the rough sandpaper of her voice."
It's tricky trying to describe the voice and the delivery of it at the same time
It's someone reminiscing/remembering the first time they spoke to her. This is the surrounding lines. " I remember her laugh, and how it dripped from her like how a good gin burns. I remember her voice, a combination of sandpaper on silk and, and I remember the bittersweet smile that crept onto her face in between sips and drags." It's not the best or anything and needs to be reworked, lol.
Oh! I thought you were describing the voice of the person talking. You have more leeway in dialogue.
“I remember her voice. Rough, but always full of confidence.”
“Rough as sandpaper, but also as smooth as silk, filled with confident.”
It’s just a little weird as people normally don’t compare a voice to sandpaper in my experience.
this has a lot of words to describe voices
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maybe you could say something with the word "steady" to include the smoothness?
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I don't want to be unhelpful, but just to be truthful, I don't see the need to say that her voice is "smooth" at all. It's not really necessary, or at least it doesn't seem like it to me . . .
And another new one.
Well, it's not always necessary, but if you are introducing a character, sometimes the way their voice sounds is very important to characterization. Of course you won't use those descriptions for characters whose personalities aren't somehow important, but when they are, definitely depict their voice sound/speaking style. I actually added it to my templates, as I at least like to have an idea of how my characters sound when I'm writing them.
well all right, that makes sense.
And that first "new one" is me, I made an account and then deleted it - I don't know why, I just did - and made another one.
an example of one my character's voice descriptions would be:
Alice has a very small and breathy voice, usually talking in a loud whisper. She often sounds as if she's out of breath and she's trying to catch it while talking. When speaking to large groups Alice's voice gets very tremulous and she has a hard time finishing sentences. Her laugh is quite soft and is described by many people as "cutesy." Alice also sometimes has a slight Scottish accent due to her adoptive father being Scottish. Growing up mostly around him had an influence on the way she talks.
And that first "new one" is me, I made an account and then deleted it - I don't know why, I just did - and made another one.
I figured. People do that here.