forum Can someone evaluate my protagonist ?? It's urgent ...

Started March 24, 2019 by Alice Dale

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Hey … I'm writting a mediaval fiction and I really like my character … Can someone evaluate her ?? Please , I need other's opinions.

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Can you make it public so that I can help? Thank you! :D

Can you make it public so that I can help? Thank you! :D

I think it is public now , thanks

You need to make it public.

Check now if you can , thank you <3

I'd recommend perhaps putting more detail into her personality. Like what about her actions makes her so selfish? Perhaps put more detail of her lover's death in her past (which is somewhere in the character temp). Also if you want me to speak from a medieval stsndpoint, I would think that your character being caught with a female lover is plenty ruining of her reputation.

I'd recommend perhaps putting more detail into her personality. Like what about her actions makes her so selfish? Perhaps put more detail of her lover's death in her past (which is somewhere in the character temp). Also if you want me to speak from a medieval stsndpoint, I would think that your character being caught with a female lover is plenty ruining of her reputation

Thank you so much , but in this world (Saros) the kingdom rulers can require any gender of prostitutes ( tho they can't assume that on public or marry them). Anyways I will take your sugestion and probably build an arch-enemy that will try to bring her down with that argument.

Thanks very much , really … I'm glad you helped

I'd recommend perhaps putting more detail into her personality. Like what about her actions makes her so selfish? Perhaps put more detail of her lover's death in her past (which is somewhere in the character temp). Also if you want me to speak from a medieval stsndpoint, I would think that your character being caught with a female lover is plenty ruining of her reputation

Thank you so much , but in this world (Saros) the kingdom rulers can require any gender of prostitutes ( tho they can't assume that on public or marry them). Anyways I will take your sugestion and probably build an arch-enemy that will try to bring her down with that argument.

Thanks very much , really … I'm glad you helped

Ahhhh that makes sense. I think I would have put that somewhere in the character template, but personally that's just me. You're welcome! I'm glad to have helped you out.

I'd give her more identifying marks like spots, freckles, or scars. Very few people have completely unblemished skin. For the education part, it might help to try to think of a regular education equivalent (would her level of education be equivalent to graduating high school?). I also see no backstory, family, or friends but I assume you'll include those in the book. Her personality is a bit lacking but she's not a bad character.

I'd give her more identifying marks like spots, freckles, or scars. Very few people have completely unblemished skin. For the education part, it might help to try to think of a regular education equivalent (would her level of education be equivalent to graduating high school?). I also see no backstory, family, or friends but I assume you'll include those in the book. Her personality is a bit lacking but she's not a bad character.

Thanks for the advice <3