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Check her out: Violette Swifte
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Check her out: Violette Swifte
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Leave critiques (or praise), if you'd like 😘
1: she seems to be severely underweight, a woman of her height should be at least 100-110 lbs to be healthy. (It does say later that she's very thin, just wanted to let you know how much that is)
2: i like the visual description, she seems very recognizable, which is very good in terms of character design
overall a pretty solid character, i would recommend rounding her out a little more, maybe think about how she would react to certain people or events and go out from there
I think that you should shorten her "Role" section. Just write "Elderly Confectioner". We don't need a mini-backstory in her role. And as LiaAron said, she is EXTREMELY underweight. It would also be helpful if you included a picture of her. Also, if she grew up in a modest farm setting, she wouldn't attend a wealthy confectionary school for 7 years.
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