Tell me what you think. Don't be afraid if you hurt my feelings. I know that everyone has their own opinion on things, and I'll have to get used to it if I want to be an author. 😊

Actually its not bad but there are a lot of gaps. Where is your story going? If it's just about a guy hacking people up it will not keep the readers attention; what was the purpose of killing the mother…will this set the children on some sort of revenge quest? I know that you are not done but make sure that you have a goal in mind.
The biggest thing that I would work on/change is that throughout the entire story you 'told us' everything rather than 'showed.' For a rough draft I think that it is okay just so you have your idea down but I would go back and 'show' us the story.
Hope that helps.

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