forum Really need critquing

Started February 10, 2018 by @Beans&Egg

tune

Anyone willing to read this?

This looks like an amazing start to an amazing story. What do you need help with?

Just making sure that the timeline is fine and if everthing makes sense

The timeline is perfect. And everything makes sense to me. I think that this will make an AMAZING book. I'mm really hope it works out for you!

Oh right, thanks. :)

Good luck!