forum Random thing

Started December 02, 2019 by @Oakiin

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I just wrote a thing, dunno. Do whatever you want critique, ignore, just say something, idk It's just my mood rn

Words mean nothing
Empty, hollow something
Pretty smiles painted on blank faces
Eyeless, mindless, praise, shame, phases
Wide open eyes, hundreds of eyes, glowing into a sky
Covered in black, waking up, shutting down, taking things to get you high
Words mean nothing
The sky means something
We pass by hundreds of empty faces
Each going back and forth in the same endless phases
We look above, past the smog and mud into a bright and open sky
We hope and pray, swear and say, shadows will fall away, and we’ll find our high

wow

w o w

I felt that

Thanks :)

The only thing I would say for this one is "Eyeless, mindless, praise, shame, phases / Wide open eyes, hundreds of eyes, glowing into a sky." You say 'eye' three times in that, so I would recommend finding a different word for one or two repetitions.