forum pls beta read my second chapter (link to first included)

Started February 01, 2019 by @n o s t r a d a m u s location_city

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You can read my first chapter on this post:

And here is the second chapter:
https://www.evernote.com/shard/s482/sh/a28229b5-a02d-4745-9d15-9ae1dc974ae1/91758f6277695ab1060226169f274589

Feel free to critique as you wish. Both chapters are supposed to serve as introductory chapters. Thanks :)

I'm having trouble viewing your first chapter. When I click on the link it says note not found.

Sorry I must have accidentally disabled the link, here's a new one:
https://www.evernote.com/shard/s482/sh/6604657d-6e57-4736-a1a0-805e0674ff4d/d5fc2c24941a9e49294b33a3a875e8e6

Thanks, I will try reading it some time within this week.