forum Please tell me what you think of this short story :)
Started by @Periwinkle_
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@ravens

AAAAA OMG SO CUTE

i love this and i'd definitely read more! i love the flash concept you have, and i love how you've written the characters' interactions.

seeing as how the mc is named halle, is jacob based off a real person? ;)

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LOVE THIS LOVE THIS LOVE THIS dude that was so cute and well written!!!

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I mean Jacob seems really cute and honestly I am very much like Melisa and Matthew when it comes to my friends's crushes

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Definitely more than okay. May I give some more critic feedback, though?

@Periwinkle_

AAAAA OMG SO CUTE

i love this and i'd definitely read more! i love the flash concept you have, and i love how you've written the characters' interactions.

seeing as how the mc is named halle, is jacob based off a real person? ;)

Thanks btw for your feedback :)

@ravens

AAAAA OMG SO CUTE

i love this and i'd definitely read more! i love the flash concept you have, and i love how you've written the characters' interactions.

seeing as how the mc is named halle, is jacob based off a real person? ;)

Thanks btw for your feedback :)

yw! <3

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Yes, please!

Okay, so maybe this is just me… The story is great, but I feel like you could join up the Halle x Jacob part with the flash part even more? Like, make the flash more meaningful for their relationship somehow. Cause both storys are great, but it feels just a little bit like they are two separate stories just put together. Maybe that's the meaning of it since the flash is supposed to show a different universe, but I feel like they could be joined together even more to create a reason for their confessions, as an exampel. Other than that, it's great!

@Periwinkle_

Thank you! That makes a lotta sense, I could even bring the other characters into the flash a bit more, specifically melisa and matthew