forum Please destroy my character.
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@KalamariCakes

Hello! Zenith seems like a character with potential– here's my two cents and I hope it helps!

  • Firstly, Zenith is about ten pounds underweight, yikes! For a male his height (5'11"), the healthy minimum weight is around 155 lbs.
  • Secondly, I see you have him listed as ESTP, but after reading his personality traits, I'm getting more of an ENFJ vibe.
  • In science terms, getting bright red hair (like cherries, I assume) is… rather difficult, to say the least. I would aim more for the classic ginger.
  • If you're going for "badass", don't forget that this front causes a lot of emotional stress. Someone like this will stumble in this facade, and quite a lot too! A character with more dimension begins to show their weaknesses through cracks. Don't be afraid to let certain things be out of his control; don't be afraid to let him fail, and most importantly, the best stories break their characters to push them towards a healthier mental state.
  • As for the killing thing, be careful. I feel like you're wading into psychopath territory rather than lovable character.

Overall, I feel like Zenith needs more depth. Intensity is okay, trauma is a real thing, yes, but I feel like its being turned into a superpower rather than a tool for development. Maybe try focusing on that healing power. Make him have to calm down, meditate, to be able to use it. Make it frustrating for him, so he's forced to adapt. Don't rely on toughness to impress an audience ;)
Good luck! I hope this helped, merry writing!!