Yeah as an opening it kinda bores me?? (that sounds awful i didn't mean to be so harsh) I'd put more intrigue in my opening sentences? I get that you want to get an overview of the world first thing but add something that just "hooks" the reader, ya know?, like my current WIP has these opening lines:
"When I was younger, I would look at the palm of my hand and daydream. The rune there was dead and devoid of color, but it had once been yellow and full of energy. Legends said that powerful runes could destroy whole cities, and even the weaker ones weren’t much better."
The first sentence is so…strange. Why would someone daydream about something on the palm of their hand? It draws the reader to keep reading (at least i hope it does lol) and then it explains and gets some of the world building in there, which is always important in the first chapter, don't get me wrong.
Another story of mine started out with dialog:
"What do you think is down there?"
"Our untimely deaths, no doubt."
It introduces characters and draws the reader into the story and the action first thing.
Whenever I have a question concerning writing and I want good examples, i pick up favorite books of mine by authors i respect and look for examples. I would read the opening lines of your favorite books and see how they did it. lots of different things work, just make it a "hook" like an english teacher would call it
Keep it up and keep writing! There's plenty in that opening that could be spun to be very interesting! Especially since it's first person, you can do a lot of fun things with the opening. (i love writing in 1st person)
If you want an awesome published example I absolutely adore, heres Lockwood and Co: The Screaming Staircase, by Jonathan Stroud (highly recommend it i love it to death):
"Of the first few hauntings I investigated with Lockwood & Co. I intend to say little, in part to protect the identity of the victims, in part because of the gruesome nature of the incidents, but mainly because, in a variety of ingenious ways, we succeeded in messing them all up. There, I've admitted it!"
