forum I would greatly appreciate feedback.

Started February 06, 2019 by Deleted user

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The only thing I'd say is get a few people to read the scene with the man with the strong accent as I'm a Yorkshire lass so I can understand such things but perhaps some might not be able to read it as fluently as someone who is used to deciphering strong accents. However I don't think I'm the best person to critique the brothel half of the piece as I'm only young. However for the UW perhaps you could use something like perverted or insane. Good luck with the rest of your writing though, and you should have a lovely day/night too.

That's alright hun xx