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@Joneathan

@AmmyPajammy Honestly that's going to be me as an old grandparent. But anyway I feel like this character is well rounded out and I could actually get a feel for this character. But something I feel I got from this character was that she is very rude, but she's also kind of putting it up. No fully really, but I feel that she does have a soft spot that you seemed to kind of embrace but also push as far away from you because she is just a grumpy old lady. If you brought this out a bit more then I think it would make her seem more real. Other than that I don't have any complaints, really good character and I would definitely try her sweets.

@AmmyPajammy

Thanks for checking her out. And yes, you're absolutely right about her grumpiness being a bit of a front! I'll take what you said to mind, but I'm glad you liked her.

@Joneathan

@@Rubyjane sorry It's so late. Now I don't really get a good feel of this character, it just doesn't feel like he could be a real person. I think it's because he is just sweet and kind and nervous all of the time. That was the vibe I was picking up from him. There are a lot of characters that i know of that seem like they would be real. but they also have this thing to them, like not only will some be sweet and shy, but they might also be serious when they need to be. I'm not really seeing something like that in your character. I'm sorry that this is a jumbled up mess, but I hope you can get some meaning out of it.