forum I need some thoughts on my book "blurb" so I can put it on a book cover :\
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@Laurenisnotmyrealname

Hello everyone!
I'm about to submit my book "blurb" (the small summary thing on the back of books and such) to a book cover designer, but I want to make sure it's actually … good?
Any thoughts or critiques would be awesome! Thank you all! Here's a free donut.

It's been twenty-four hours since the bombing. The first attack in three hundred years.

The world is in panic. Everyone is pointing fingers, desperate for answers.

But a small town in the farming region of North Cordell has a curious suggestion.
The rumored immortal warriors who roam the mountains, which no one dares enter.

When a terrified young girl stumbles into the small region, she has no intentions of becoming involved. But a light in the mountains calls to her.
Now caught up in a plot against the world, she and five others must prove their innocence and discover the truth, along with the true intentions of a mysterious Sergeant.
But the truth is deadly.
And once it knows your name, there's no going back.

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I don't actually really know much about writing a blurb, but I do have a couple of minor suggestions. Feel free to take them with a grain of salt:

  • "The world is in panic. Everyone is pointing fingers, desperate for answers." I don't know why, but I'm not super crazy about this bit, especially the first sentence. If your setting has its first bombing in 300 years then I feel like it's kind of a given that the world is going to be in panic. I guess I just feel like there are more interesting ways of getting that information across.
  • "When a terrified young girl" Does she have a name?
  • "But a light in the mountains calls to her." This sentence feels a little weird to me as well. I know it's not a sentence fragment, but it kind of reads like one to me anyways. It's a cool line, it just needs some tweaking imo.

Definitely seems like a cool story though.