forum Flash fiction? (please read and give opinions!)

Started September 14, 2018 by @Jilly.G

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Could someone read my flash fiction assignment? I did this a while ago but I wanted to know what others thought about it. I did it for my creative writing class last semester. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1d3m233FcEM2twziok_Zyl5GqQYwtPVQPnHZ_Q4toW54/edit?usp=sharing

Are you looking for detailed, line-by-line feedback looking at things like grammar and punctuation, or more general feedback regarding things like plot and characters?

More of plot and character. I know I made mistakes grammar wise and am fixing it