forum Critique of character & story?

Started March 28, 2020 by @storyshifter pets

tune

Hey, I'd like some critique on Azi Tamazi and the worldbuilding I kinda have so far for the world that he's in? Whic' It is a WIP right now and there's bound to be more, but I'd just like some advice and help.

Thanks if you want to help :D

Hello lad!
I adore Azi with all my heart, honestly soft boy extraordinaire. There wasn't much that stood out to me, negative or positive. like you said, it really needs to be fleshed out more before a proper evaluation can be performed, but so far I love the concept and it sounds like one of the few science fiction novels id actually enjoy. Its definitely a good idea, and it has good potential, but for now, what id recommend is ad more meat to the bones and trying to understand the fountains and laws surrounding the two parties, why it was so hard to identify Azi's magic and the important characters from each side of the war.

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:) spooko