I rewrote my prologue, so I need someone to critique it
Her Mother was a Angel, her father was a human; She was a Halman. Her name is Allison Mercy.
Allison has strawberry blonde hair, emerald green eyes, and is friends with the Angel of Death herself, Azrael.
Together with Azrael, Damien (her boyfriend), and others, they travel to alternate universes and different countries all the way to Paradox Vortex, Montana. There, the showdown with Vozreal, a being as old as time who sounds like he's a 1930s radio host and has terrifying crimson eyes, begins.
This isn't a prologue, it's an information dump and a brief summary of what happens in your story. Your readers don't need to know all of this before they start reading, they should discover it by reading the actual story you want to tell. A prologue should gives us information that cannot be organically delivered during the actual story, but is nevertheless essential to the plot.
https://youtu.be/Qv9qcTbwAiw Here is a link for a great video about prologues if you want more information on the topic, but if you want my honest opinion, skip the prologue and just go straight to chapter one. They are usually unnecessary anyway…
Sorry if this isn't very helpful, but there is honestly not much more I can say. It's a tiny "chapter" and I am very tired, but I think the video I sent you is going to help you a LOT (Seriously, this channel is GREAT, I highly recommend you watch his other videos)
