forum Character Critique?

Started January 20, 2018 by Name

tune

I was wondering if anyone could give me some feedback on my main protagonist. Feel free to be harsh or ask questions, I'll answer them the best I can. Thank-you!

ill check them out:)

love the backstory on this one!! everything is really descriptive and this looks like a really cool story. also i love the name, its really regal:)

Yay, thank-you! I had been thinking about changing the name to make it match her country's culture more, so that means a lot that you liked it!

Hi! I might be a ~little~ late to the party, but I'd love to help!

Okay, top down…

Okay, since I haven't seen anything yet, I'd just like to compliment how you used Hogwarts houses! That's a great idea!!

Okay, politics–so it's a bit of a weird field. However, I always find it helpful to put down how liberal my characters are. It helps you understand your characters on another little level!!

YES! Excellent job on the backstory. I think you would benefit to add a couple more details, though–explain her prejudices and motivations, especially. The backstory really hits most everything else, so awesome job there!

Overall: EXCELLENT job. A very well-developed character for sure!! Probably one of the best I've reviewed thus far.

I hope that this helps you!! :DDD