forum Can someone read this and give me feedback?

Started February 22, 2019 by @CheesyRomanceSap

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I had a moment of inspiration and wanted to get my thoughts down before they disappeared. Any advice?

This is the only part of my story so far, I've been working on characters, but I guess inspiration struck me.

Story Snippet:
I had just worked through the last problem and I was feeling very confident in myself.
“That’s right, isn’t it?” I looked up and Trevor seemed very close all of a sudden. Had we been sitting this close the entire time? I don’t think so. I didn’t remember scooting closer to him, had he moved? No, I’m pretty sure I would’ve noticed that. So when did-
“Yeah, that looks good. Foirfe,” he smiled. His voice sounded lower than normal and it seemed like he leaned in a little bit when he said that. I started to feel really weird. When I looked down I noticed that we were definitely sitting closer than earlier. I was fiddling with my rings when I felt him nudge my face up with his nose. He paused for a moment and I could feel his breath across my lips. Before I could process what was happening, He closed the gap and slowly kissed me.
“What was that?”
“I shouldn’t have done that, it was way out of line. Your homework’s finished now, I’ll just get all my stuff and-”
I didn’t want him to leave just yet, so I grabbed his face and kissed him again to shut him up. I felt him tense briefly before humming and sliding his hands around my waist to pull me closer. My fingers traveled up to his hair as our lips moved in sync with each other.
“No, I liked it,” I breathed as I pulled away and placed my forehead against his.
“Good, I thought I had made a terrible mistake. See, I’ve liked you since the moment I saw you and then I saw the look on your face and-”
“Just shut up,” I teased as I quickly kissed him again. We looked down and laughed as we both noticed I was now in Trevor’s lap.
“So, I guess we need to tell everyone now, huh?” I said as I got off my bed and walked to the door. I felt his arms go around my waist and a kiss on my temple before he muttered in my ear, “I think they already knew.”

Any thoughts?

Trevor is originally from Scotland so I wanted to throw in a little bit of Scottish Gaelic. I know that the main language in Scotland is English though.