forum Can somebody critique my first chapters?

Started August 23, 2018 by @Penstorm

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If you have any trouble accessing these let me know - its just the bones of the chapters
chapter 1

chapter 2

chapter 3

Wow. Das intense, but really well written. 10/10.

Thank you so much! Is there anything you notice that didn't add up or I needed to explain more? Could you follow the story line fairly easy?

Yeah, but if you did explain how everyone got in the situations they we're in that would be helpful. You can reveal it later on as well, I'm just saying.