forum aaay i don't normally do this, but can someone look at my character? i need a second pair of eyes :)

Started July 06, 2018 by @TryToDoItWrite

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Her name is Camille and she's my child!

I'll take a look.

Ok, so she is a really great character. My one note is that just form the notes she seem seems a little to perfect. Maybe her brother's capture makes her reckless, she wants to rush in to help everyone even when she is only doing more harm. Who knows maybe she already does that and I just missed it. Overall really, really good!

Thanks for the feed back! Yeaaah, I've struggled with her being a bit too nice. Over the drafts she's oscillated between being a literal angel and just a v. loyal person with high morals. I've settled down on her being a true hufflepuff. I'm actually basing a lot of her personality on one of my aunts who's generosity ends up hurting her more than helping. She's the foil to my other main character who describes her, rather bitterly, as "innocence incarnate"

Your Welcome! She's an amazing character and I'm sure your story will turn out great.

She is a good character, but as A.J. said, she seems a bit too perfect. When writing a character, this is called a "Mary Sue". I like how you made her positivity a "bad" thing, but maybe add something more. Maybe she had a tragic accident as a child and now she's stubborn. Look up "Possible Character Flaws" on Google to see what you can find. Maybe you could even add another type of setback, such as maybe she has a learning disability or another quirk. Keep going, you're on the road to an awesome character!