"What Jack…you had to mess me up with the queen.." Jack would smile "Aw..a Little elf with the queen How qute!" He'd joke. " Shut up…your a lion..only 3 ranks higher than me…" He'd frown. "You are still the lowest on the creachers list..so thats somthing.." He'd chuckle. "Just shut up..Im going back.." Jack smacked him. He'd kick Jack making him fly to the wall. "I may be an elf.. but I'm strong.." He'd say walking away.
Crystal heard the commotion and came over immediately. "Oh Lion how dare you! You could never dance ya know. Paws are too big. Ungraceful and loud too. Elves have slim feet but are strong for lifts, and their long arm reach makes it naturally easier to spin around. Now then. Set him down. And relax. Enjoy the ball! Find a pretty maiden or handsome man to whisk away the night with!" She then took the elves arm, folded it over her own, and walked off haughtily.
(I'll answer tomorrow)
(k)
(I’m back on my alt my main account is on another device that’s dead)
(okey)
(K I’m back on my main)
(don't matter to me,as long as you're here!)
He'd smile. "My queen..thank you for dealing with him.." He'd sigh. "I must go now..I must go home..I'm sorry my queen..good bye" He'd smile at her and run off, out of the ballroom, into the town. He'd walk in to his house, now in normal cloths, but his smile faded as he saw his father standing there.
She watched him go, and huffed as she's whisked away back into the dancing crowd. (aw he should've stayed. The scene hadn't even ended yet! It would've been a lot more interesting to see the Lion dude get jealous and the two begin to sort of argue for her. Back and forth trying to win her over with dancing and compliments. You don't gotta change anything but. Consider possibilities)
(I can do that lol)
(I'll head back there)
"F-father! Hello!" His father had a mad face " And where were you..?" andrew (Our Supreme Lord and Overseer) couldn't say he was at the ball because he was forbidden to go.Father will thow me in the.. He'd think getting cut off. "TELL ME andrew (Our Supreme Lord and Overseer)! YOU BETTER HAVENT BEEN AT THAT BALL! " andrew (Our Supreme Lord and Overseer) jumped. "Father..I'm in my regular cloths. That's impossible…" He'd get sent to the room, remembering the Queen. He'd gasp and jump out the window and ran back to the ball. He got dressed using mgic.
(This is not a bump Just saying hi)
(oh hi. Sorry doing some family stuff I'll reply soon)
(Kk)
(Bump)
Crystal noticed as more people arrived. She sighed and spun around in the mans arms. Already she knew the courting game had started. And then, from one pair of arms to the next she found herself in the lions arms. She kept perfect pose as she bumbled around the room, his big lion feet constantly stepping on her toes. Yet she kept a soft smile and planned out where his feet would step ahead of time so she could make an effort to avoid his clumsy self.
(i am on my dang flip phone!! Ill responed l8er!)
(lol okay!)
(I’m back on a normal thing lol)
andrew (Our Supreme Lord and Overseer) would run in. He’d see the Crystal. He wanted to got to her to apologize but every time he’d get rejected from it. He’d eventually give up and go to the snack table. He’d take a cookie and munch on it, staring at Crystal. She’d turn around and he’d turn around. He’d realize that Jack was dancing with her. Man Queen Crystal was right.. Lions can’t dance! He’d think and chuckle still avoiding eye contact with her.
(Try to flow a little more with your writing. Write like you're making a recipe. Not just "He'd go to the snack table. He'd look at Crystal." Try "He walked over to the snack table and gazed at Crystal, studying her fine movements and the lions clumsy ones." Detail is important. It'll read a lot more and give you room to be able to explain a character, since actions speak louder than words.)
(Try to flow a little more with your writing. Write like you're making a recipe. Not just "He'd go to the snack table. He'd look at Crystal." Try "He walked over to the snack table and gazed at Crystal, studying her fine movements and the lions clumsy ones." Detail is important. It'll read a lot more and give you room to be able to explain a character, since actions speak louder than words.)
(I’m sorry. It’s late and I’m tiered. Hopefully tomorrow I’ll have better grammar =/ )
(Alright. How about you get some rest and we can continue tomorrow?)
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