So like, I'm super weird about making forum threads for some reason, but I've been thinking that this one could be fun.
Your opening line is supposed to make your reader want to keep reading your story to find out more, and I'm curious as to what sentences you guys have come up with to do just that. Feel free to add context if you want.
Right now, I'm working on 2 main things: a sci-fi/ mystery thing, and a fantasy thing. My opening lines for them are:
I'm in party hell.
and
They were gone by the time I got back.
What are yours?
The first one sounds super interesting! I'd definitely want to read more of it. The fics I'm currently working on start with:
He's made his peace.
and
Makito knows he shouldn't be here.
I'm definitely hooked by y'all's openings! They sound interesting! This is the opening to my current WIP:
The Empire destroyed their lives before they had even begun.
These all sound very interesting! @TryToDoItWrite yours sounds really dark. (Also, I'm sorry, but The Empire just makes me think of Star Wars XD)
Here are my opening lines:
It starts the way many things start, with a dark night and a large vat of bubbling, potentially radioactive fluid.
and
There was only one empty desk in the classroom.
and
Zinon is very strange.
and
Sydney has dark hair and bright eyes.
and….actually, you know what, I think I'll stop now XD I have waaaay too many stories I progress right now and I don't want to bore you with half a dozen opening lines.
OooooOoOO I like the first one!
I know…all I think about is Star Wars too. If you have a better name for an invading tyrannical imperial government please please let me know
@Francis
@TryToDoItWrite thanks!
If I come up with something else, I'll be sure to let you know :)
"We shouldn't be doing this."
Concept one:
The Nicolet sisters were always the most honored guests at the royal banquet.
Concept two:
Leah Cobalt had exactly one talent, and it was seeming invisible.
Concept three:
Princess Amalia loved the view from the palace window.
Concept four:
My life has a striking resemble to a Shakespearean play, although I’m not sure if it’s a comedy or a tragedy.
Concept five:
“I’ll take the case,” I said, smiling. Not because of having the chance to do a good deed, but because I’m really low on cash, and I’d love to get a new motorcycle helmet.
Aw thanks!!! It’s one of my realistic fiction ones and it will tie into concept five.
Mine are
"The branch tilted forward as Rowan carefully stepped on it while peering at the deer down below."
And
"Stop squirming, " my maid Liora fussed at me as she tugged and pulled at my hair while she braided it into an intricate style.
And
"I'm cold, I'm tired, and I'm going to kill someone if you don't find me some coffee."
@InTheRye I love the last one XD
I have:
"Be safe!" cried his mother. "Don't destroy the world!"
But my favorite that I've written is from an old story draft that was eventually tossed out:
Enchiladas are dangerous things.
@RompingSphinx the second one is great
@Francis of the Fork Cult Thanks :D
Ooh fun!
Life is a matter of outlooks
I would kill for my sister, though at the moment I would much rather kill her.
Also, @TryToDoItWrite try: Colonizers, Conquerors, Overlords, Fascists or if you even just used a capital "T" Them or They for the He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named effect. (But SW rocks so not a bad thing in my book! )
"Do anything you want to me, just… don't kill my cat, okay?"
Nice! thank you so much!! @LittleBear
"What the heck is this?" Jackson asked, holding up his new bumper sticker.
"It's the Millenium Falcon, because your car is a piece of junk," I answer, "Now put it on the window so we can go!"
*He had been in the wood for hours now, looking for his brother beside the snow-covered paths. It is normally bad enough in winter, with the snow and the bone-chilling wind, but Lórinar simply couldn’t believe Daerion, who could multiply four-digit numbers in his head, would be stupid enough to ignore the warnings of huge vampire bats in the area. *
(First two sentences, sorry)
Pulling ever so slightly so as not to tear the entire wing from the small fairy’s back, Pan ground his teeth against the shriek of pain that rattled his eardrums. Pushing past the sudden appearance of his small amount of empathy, Pan pulled again, half of the thin effervescent wing now hanging limply off the fairy. The skin on her back started to swell and small red droplets oozed out of the wound, but Pan was more focused on the fairy’s small face, and the black tar-like tear that squeezed itself out of the corner of her bright blue eye.
eh… opening paragraph?
Mine's just a simple "V never like fire."
Like, that's the whole first paragraph. And I want the second book to start in a similar way, something like "V had never liked fire, but now she nearly hated it." or something like that, I think it'd be a nice parallel.
(And it's like 'haha, irony' cause she ends up being able to control fire and part of her whole character arc is her having to deal with that and getting over her fear, while still realistically-ish having trouble effectively using it with that fear.)
